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The Age Of Love (Revised)

Author's note: To start off, this story I posted a while back ago..I wanted to try to fix my mistakes since I'm...  Show full author's note »
Author's note: To start off, this story I posted a while back ago..I wanted to try to fix my mistakes since I'm a perfectionist..(It's not finished yet)I know this is an off subject but I wanted to write about this.

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POV-Billy ;D

I was awaken with a strong smell of butter and pancakes. It reminded me of when I was dating Sara, she always made me pancakes. I sighed and closed my eyes, rubbed the lids with my fingertips and tried my best to fall back to sleep. I hate memories, especially about her.

“Billy! You up? It's time for to eat up ,we are leaving for work in 10 minutes.” Adam exclaimed.

“Ugh, alright.” I replied. I don't usually eat break fest, only when I'm really truly hungry, today I'm not. I walked over towards there table, Kim was looking very nice this morning, with her hair pulled back with black chop sticks in her hair, she always liked putting her hair up like that. She wore a black tank top with a gray vest, with a tight mini skirt, which obviously Adam didn't like her wearing. Adam was filling a dish full with scrambled eggs, pancakes, and buttered toast for me. He grabbed me a fork and made his way towards the table, he plopped down my plate, as he sat down next to me, facing Kim.

“If you guys are both leaving for work, who is going to babysit Violet?” I questioned. Making my way up,back to there kitchen to get me something to drink. Adam drank his milk, and replied,

“Oh, mom comes over to babysit.” I nodded, as I filled a tall glass with orange juice. I made my way back to the table. I started picking at my food, running my tongue across my teeth, and I finally asked,

“Violet still in bed?” They look up at me, giving me a look.

“Yes. Why?” Kim asked, moving the fork of eggs towards her mouth.

“No reason, just wondering.” I replied quickly, face flushing. There was a very long silence. Finally they finished, and they said there goodbyes as they left. I cleared there table, and washed there dishes. I didn't want to leave a mess for Adam's mother Janet. Janet is a very good mother to Adam, but he never appreciated it until now apparently. As I was cleaning there counter, I heard the door open, and footsteps moving towards the living room. I sat down the dish towel on the counter, and walked out to meet her. When she saw me, her eyes grew large and she gave me a big hug and kiss.
“Little Bill! I've missed you boy, why haven't you came to see me?” She exclaimed. I smiled, and laughed.

“Well, I haven't really had much time, with work and college.” I stated. She nodded slowly.

“Studying to be an attorney I hear, I figured you do something like that.” She said smiling.
“I love it, even though it's a lot of hard work.” I replied softly. She smiled at me again, her dark blue eyes set on me, looking me over.

“Well, that's good Billy.” She replied.

“Janet? How did you get here if the main road is flooded?” I asked.

“Oh, there's a cow path next to the Andersen’s, you didn't know that?” She sounded surprised. The Andersen's are a very old couple who has lived in the same place for many years. I can't believe I didn't know there was a path there.

“No, well now I do, Well nice seeing you again Janet, but I must be getting home.” I said hurriedly. She frowned, and narrowed her eyes at me.

“Why are you leaving so soon? Stay and talk with me Billy.” She said sternly. I looked at her and smirked, she seemed to like me more than her own son which was quite sad.

“I need to get home, get ready for work and study I really wish I could stay but I can't. I'm babysitting Violet tonight though.” I stated. Her eyes brightened, and she smiled.

“What do you think of Violet? She's growing up so quick.” She said softly, almost sadly.

“She's a sweet little girl, but Adam and Kim need to stop fighting, really for her sake.” I said.

“I know, I know but there still so immature, they act like there still in high school Billy, it's ridiculous!” She exclaimed. I could tell that she's frustrated with her son, I wouldn't blame her.

“It is, but I really should be going. I will come visit you some time Janet, I promise.” I said. She smiled.

“You better, I miss seeing you Billy.” She said. I nodded, and made my way into the living room, I folded up the blanket I used the night before, and sat it on the pillow. I brushed my hair with my fingers, and made my way out. It stopped raining for once, it was pretty foggy out though, and very muddy. I sighed, I still have to go home, and get ready for work. I reached my car, unlocked it and got inside. I adjusted my mirrors, clicked my seat belt on and started the engine I headed towards the Andersen's and Mr. Andersen was sitting on the porch, smoking a pipe. He must be at least 90 now but he's still kicking, I waved he looked at me like I was a stranger, I figured. I looked to my right, and I seen the small cow path that Janet was speaking to me about. I made my way down the bumpy road.

It was so bumpy, it made me annoyed but after a couple curvy turns I ended up in the outskirts of town, thank god ;Janet knew what she was talking about. I saw the sight of me in my mirror, and I looked like a mess, like usual but I didn't really mind. The roads were packed full of people now, and I turned to get on the right side, so I can get on the right street to get home. I stopped at the red light, and floored it on the green. I reached the road towards home. I took a right and I saw my apartment complex from the distance. I picked up my pace again, and I reached the parking lot of my apartment. I parked, locked the door and made my way inside. I smiled, there was Sara. She saw me as she sipped on her coffee she motioned for me to come over with her finger. I walked towards her, and rested my arms and folded them on her overly large secretary's desk. She looked very attractive today, her hair pulled back and everything her eyes sparkling as she talked.

“Billy, where were you last night? I called you.” She asked. I narrowed my eyes, why was she trying to get a hold of me anyway?

“ I was at my old friends house, his road flooded.” I replied. She raised her eyebrow, a non believing gaze on her face.

“What? Did you think I was out with a some woman last night?” I rose my voice. Her face flushed, and she looked down.

“ I called to see if we could go out to eat, on a date.” She spoke silently. I instantly felt like a total ass. I brushed my bangs out of my face, in embarrassment.

“Sara, I'm sorry. I shouldn't of raised my voice, would you like to do that maybe tomorrow evening?” I asked, not really knowing if I'm up to going out on another date with her, since how bad our relationship was.

“No, never mind your obviously to busy to go out on dates.” She snapped. I deserved that I thought. Without a reply,I just walked down the hall towards my apartment. I felt like a jerk, when I usually am sweet and a gentlemen towards women, but she hurt me dearly and I'm still really not over that. I reached my door, and unlocked it. I walked inside, my apartment a mess like usual. I decided to go get dressed for work, which I didn't really have to dress up for. I sighed, as I walked into my room. I undressed, and looked around in my closet to find my shirt I wear for the bar, I found it. It was a black shirt with the name of the bar written on right side of the shirt. “Firelight Bar and Grill”, I slipped it on and put on jeans and my old sneakers. I don't understand why we work so early, its a bar. I guess its for those old drunks.
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MissEmilyDickinsonThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 26, 2014 at 10:47 am
This was extremely different, but it was such a good story! The idea, the concept was just diffferent. I read the whole book, in one sitting; the ending was sad to me, but your story was still beautiful and amazing. You have such a talent and greatness and talent in you; and you're an amazing and wonderful and talented writer. It's just true. :) Thank you so much, my friend! For sharing this. :)
DLY1912 said...
Feb. 6, 2014 at 10:32 pm
OMG! I'm hanging onto the edge of my seat! This is awesome! I want them to end up together! I'm only on chapter 4! I can't wait to find out what happens! Good job girl!
HiddenAngelInTheDark said...
May 4, 2012 at 3:16 pm
I love your book so cute yet sad yet still cute. Quick Question: Did you write more chapters or just one? because when I click next it goes back to the cover page
MissDarkCross replied...
May 4, 2012 at 6:21 pm
Thank you! I made a lot of chapters.. going back nd forth between Billy & Violet.  I don't know.. I guess you just reached the end of my book o.o
HiddenAngelInTheDark replied...
Jun. 9, 2012 at 9:13 am
Welcome and I see there so good and I can relate to Billy
XingOffTheDays replied...
Feb. 13, 2013 at 9:47 pm
Omg! I never seen your reply!   I am so sorry! <3 (I don't get on much.) That's good then? I'm happy my story can be relatable. <3:3
cuckoo_for_cocoa_puffs said...
Apr. 29, 2012 at 6:25 pm

Oops! totally did not check the sentence before posting it! Sorry for the bad grammar and such!


MissDarkCross replied...
Apr. 30, 2012 at 2:32 pm

Hhaha It's okay xD

.. Yeah.. Lol Thanks!<3

cuckoo_for_cocoa_puffs said...
Apr. 29, 2012 at 6:24 pm
Okay, at first, I was like "Pedophile?", but then I further and realized that's no the case. Nice job!
Lindsey31 said...
Apr. 9, 2012 at 4:41 pm

This is soooo sad!!! Wow! It's a tragic love story. You are a great writer! I literally got goosebumps in the end.

But NEVER, ever second-guess yourself or think that you aren't a good writer. You are fantastic. Just because you make a couple gramatic mistakes doesn't make you bad. I envy your writing! If you have time, I'd love for you to read some of my work. Keep writing (:

MissDarkCross replied...
Apr. 10, 2012 at 5:18 pm

It is, I watched a movie kinda based like this...and I've read books..so I got really interested in it. I'm so happy you got goosebumps! ;D I can't believe I left that impact!

>__< Oh.. thanks.. I'm trying to improve. & I will.. :3

Jan. 26, 2012 at 10:47 am
your wellcome your amazing
MissDarkCross replied...
Jan. 26, 2012 at 2:34 pm
Really? Hahah Thanks
MissDarkCross said...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 4:30 pm
Sorry that I repeated the last chapter in chapter 13.. DX Didn't mean to. Just noticed tht now.
SecretGothicGirl said...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 1:03 am
OMG this story was awesome!!!!! I couldn't stop reading it, the ending was sad, i really did tear up a little.The way there love for each other was so romantic,and in the end it was still there even though he was gone.Keep writing because you VERY good!!!!
MissDarkCross replied...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 3:14 pm
Thank you so much!
MissDarkCross replied...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 3:15 pm
I'm happy it made you tear up.. it made me tear up as well.. because I finished it..and I'm proud of the story. :3 I tried my best.. >.
SecretGothicGirl replied...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 4:01 pm
when you first uploaded your story did you have 2,500 words because im starting on my first novel on here and im around 1,500
MissDarkCross replied...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 4:29 pm
Uhm.. I have no clue? Lmao I'm sorry. :3 I don't think it matters how many words you have.. in your story. >.
DirectingGabs said...
Dec. 30, 2011 at 10:30 pm
Oh wow! The end was suprising. But it waws good. Great job!

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