Thank you, I appreciate it.

I know the summary to the story isn't that interesting or eye grabbing, and I appologize. My weakness is actually trying to grab the reader's attention, and I wish there was a way I could revise it, but oh well. Thank you for checking it out.

This is really good; I like the descriptions you use, it makes me feel as if I’m really there, and it’s so realistic it feels as if it could be a movie.  Landon has a very interesting personality and so does Mae.  The only thing I was confused on was when Landon took over the ping pong stand and then it said, “The Snob still hadn’t come back with her for the past hour and a half that I’d taken over the stand.”  When I read that it didn’t feel to me like very much time had passed.  Maybe put asterisks or something to signalize the time change.  Just an idea.  :) 

I really enjoyed reading this though!  Keep up the good work though and I hope you continue on this novel!