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HomeFading Broken Dreams
Fading Broken Dreams
Summary: Elsa has always walked alone, save for Caro, the stuffed bear.
Walked on this road of forgotten things, abandoned things,
abandoned creatures. Flown with the wind and clung to the air
until she inevitably fell once more.
Then something changes.
People from the dirty, flashing cities along the way begin to
find the way there. They do not know where it is. They do not
know what it is. They do not know who the flying girl with the
stuffed bear is.
And they don't know the rules of the road.
Objects begin disappearing. Smaller ones she never noticed, large
ones she'd always known. She has no idea where they've
gone, but she does know the road beneath her has begun to
disintegrate.
A man has come from the cities, but unlike the others, he refuses
to return.
The shadows that always clung to the trees, hid their faces from
the sun, have become bolder. They attack, they destroy. They are
angry.
Elsa's silent life is cracking at the edges, fading into
chaos.
Walked on this road of forgotten things, abandoned things,
abandoned creatures. Flown with the wind and clung to the air
until she inevitably fell once more.
Then something changes.
People from the dirty, flashing cities along the way begin to
find the way there. They do not know where it is. They do not
know what it is. They do not know who the flying girl with the
stuffed bear is.
And they don't know the rules of the road.
Objects begin disappearing. Smaller ones she never noticed, large
ones she'd always known. She has no idea where they've
gone, but she does know the road beneath her has begun to
disintegrate.
A man has come from the cities, but unlike the others, he refuses
to return.
The shadows that always clung to the trees, hid their faces from
the sun, have become bolder. They attack, they destroy. They are
angry.
Elsa's silent life is cracking at the edges, fading into
chaos.
KimenSnowIt really is like a dream. Amazing.
Medina D. this story is so original!! :) i really like it. I was instantly sucked into another world..........Elsa's world. And you made flying humans and talking teddy bears sound perfectly normal in this book too. You even added a taste of reality in there too; this is just amazing! I look forward to reading more.........though there IS one thing i was curious about:
Does Caro actually talk, or is it Elsa's imagination?
Thank you so much for the comment! :D And Caro does actually talk, as does Mote; it's not just her imagination.
WritomaniaI really like your prologue..
Your story has a very mysterious aura around it.. i think it's BEAUTIFUL..
I'll give more feedback after having read the rest.. keep writing :P
CarrieAnn13
This is a very interesting story. The prologue doesn't really have much to do with the main story, but you still have to add chapters, right?
The first sentence of the first chapter just doesn't seem right. I don't think you have to put that dash between 'normally' and 'quiet' because dashes are used to stand for words like and, to and versus between two words of equal weight.
Maybe you could have described Caro a bit more because I didn't realize... (more »)
Thanks for the comment. =)
Actually, the prologue does have to do with the main story. :o That is Elsa narrating it, and it's basically foreshadowing the plot.
I think I do need to clarify that Caro is a teddy bear sooner, since a number of people have been confused about that.
Again, thank you. :D
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