read the whole thing
know you only missing one thing,
A member ship of MACHINIMA
Jk you not a gamer, not even pro
Thank you for your comments!
Sure I'll check out your work!
nice job tanaya.
it is absolutely mervellous.keep it up.
Well done, waiting for your next story like this. How to create a vamapire story? simple tips as follows:
A good place to start is by reviewing other vampire fiction. Read the folklore, read the classics as well as current vampire books. Watch the movies and the televisions shows. Then forget about everything else you've read and seen and develop a vampire universe that is yours.Read more:
Excellent, Good work Tanaya.
Keep it up
Firstly, scary! You can actually think from the PoV of a vampire and that too with so much ease that it makes one wonder. Are you....? :)
Secondly, really nice read, very imaginative and beautifully laid out. What I like, especially, is the plot line that is so intricately woven. Mighty nice, I must say!
Nice work Tanaya
You must've worked you butt of.
Suggestion: Make chapters a begining of a new topic like a ordinary novel
Like: Use of detail, vivid details, topic
Its really good, except I don't think u should divide the chapters like that. they're not exactly a new "segment," but more of a continuation of the previous thought.
:-) Keep up the good work. (woW that sounds cheezy)