Tragic Parallel

November 17, 2012
By Romanovich BRONZE, Norman, Oklahoma
Romanovich BRONZE, Norman, Oklahoma
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Summary:

When the bus nears its final destination, two stops change the fate of all riding it. One boy boards with a mind of malicious moral purity, the other with a mind full of regret. The bus ride seems especially short that day.
As the students depart, all seems normal. For all except these two, who await fate's entanglement.


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Tragic Parallel


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CammyS SILVER said...
on Dec. 5 2012 at 7:30 am
CammyS SILVER, Papillion, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
No passion in the world is equal to the passion to alter someone else's draft.
H. G. Wells
Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream.
Mark Twain

Ah, that does make more sense.

on Dec. 3 2012 at 6:22 pm
Romanovich BRONZE, Norman, Oklahoma
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Thank you, I appreciate it! As far as the perspectives go (the emperor is nameless) the original formatting was four pages for each perspective, each written straight with no chapters.  Then this site wanted me to split it into chapters, so I just took out snap shots capable of describing in one word.  That probably altered the way it reads quite a bit.

CammyS SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2012 at 7:57 am
CammyS SILVER, Papillion, Nebraska
5 articles 0 photos 188 comments

Favorite Quote:
No passion in the world is equal to the passion to alter someone else's draft.
H. G. Wells
Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream.
Mark Twain

This was unbelievable. I can't believe you wrote this, for, as MayaS. says, your writing blows my mind. The characters sound so real, with distinct voices but yet both so real. One suggestion I can think of is for you to alternate the characters, do the emperor (I can't remember his name) at home, then Clayton at home. The emperor boarding the bus, Clayton boarding the bus. Also wouldn't everybody be in their classrooms at the time, instead of out in the halls? Amazing work, simply amazing!

MayaS. BRONZE said...
on Dec. 2 2012 at 2:20 pm
MayaS. BRONZE, Mundelein, Illinois
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1st: Your writing blows my mind. 2nd: Your writing blows my mind. 3rd: Your writing blows my mind.  




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