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Prologue

Cold.
Her lips are like ice. They gently touch my throat, and I feel her fangs sink into my skin. I want to fight, but I don't.
I know what I'm doing is wrong, but I can't help it. The vampire pulls away, smiling. Her teeth are red with my blood.
Why?
I've asked myself more times than I can count, but I know I can't answer it. I don't know why. I don't know why I keep coming back, night after night, deceiving everyone I know and love. But it's the only way I'll survive. After
The prologue is not from Aden's point of view, as the rest of the novel is. Whose point of view it is will become clear as the plot unravels.
everyone I know is dead, she'll reward me.
I stare into her dead eyes, blacker than the bottom of her empty, lifeless heart and I know she's lying. The only reward I'll get is living through everyone else's deaths. And when she's finished, she'll kill me, too.
"Aden had a premonition," I whisper, knowing the only way to leave with my life is to give the vampire more important information. Information that could kill everyone I care about.
"What did she see?" Her cruel voice tears through the dim light.
"The other vampire." In an attempt to please her, I add, "The one you don't like. He was feeding."
She nods, her eyes thoughtful. "I know you hate betraying her. The two of you are so close..." Her lips curl into a sharp smile.
I swallow hard, not sure how to respond.
"Leave," she orders, not even bothering to look at me as I phase and trot out the door.
I break into a run as soon as I'm out of the abandoned building she calls home. I stop by a small creek, shifting human and scrubbing the already drying blood off of my neck. Sweat runs down my face as I feel the vampire's dark magic coursing through my veins.
I pull the small vial out of my back pocket, wiping my sweaty palm on my jeans. I take a quick drink of the antidote, hoping it kicks in before I faint. In this part of town, no one will recognize me in the dark baggy clothes that I wear to meet the vampire.
I don't want to be recognized. I want to let her feed on me without anyone knowing, so that I don't have to face the truth. Because, the truth is, I know I'm going to die, too. I know that as the last bit of life is sucked out of me, all I'll be able to think about will be the tortured screams of everyone around me as the poisonous magic steals their lives. By that time, I'll be looking forward to dying. And there's only one word to describe the haunting pain that shoots through me as I realize what's going to happen.
Josephine.
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Snowflakes said...
Oct. 30, 2012 at 1:00 pm:
Okay so I really like the storyline you've got going on here. I love anything to do with the Greek Gods, so I was instantly into this story. I also liked how you used the three sisters, because it gives the reader a better chance to explore personalitites (if that makes sense). I know that writing about multiple people in such detail can be hard in distinguishing personalities for them all, but you seemed to do a good job of that :)
However, I do think that it moved WAY too fast. This ... (more »)
 
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these-roses said...
Jul. 29, 2012 at 1:16 pm:
wow i really like this. fantasic just like the others you wrote. the only problem i have is some of it moves a bit fast. but LOVE!!!
 
these-roses replied...
Jul. 29, 2012 at 2:24 pm :
i also loveed that you used the name kaylee, so far i have never seen this name for a character before. i mainly get upset about it because its my name. so you get extra points for that too :)
 
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Allicat001This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 2:31 pm:
Oh my gosh.  I haven't read something this well writen in a long time, and you do an excellent job at keeping pace throughout as well.  I loved this, keep writing!
 
KateyKatThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 6:45 pm :
I agree with allicat, except it feels like everything is moving too fast. Try to slow down the story with more detail and a few longer conversations.
 
WhenItRains21This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 22, 2012 at 7:21 pm :
Thanks for the feedback. The first few chapters are a bit rushed, but everything slows down by about six or so, when the actual plot kicks in. I'm trying to get them posted right now, and it would be really great if you could check them out when they're up.
 
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