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Rat Key
Summary: A man who has forgotten his name arrived in a city where he had no choice but to become a thief if he wanted to live. Every time he was caught stealing, the police would chase him, calling "Rat!" over and over again. Due to his lack of a regular name, he adopted the name Rat.
Rat went to live in the Tunnels, which is an enormous and elaborate maze of tunnels that run underneath the futuristic city of Maw. The unfortunate thing; that's where all of the gangs reside. Rat has no interest in joining a gang, so they don't exactly like him down there, but then again, they don't exactly like on the Surface either.



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MoraleAshThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 12 at 9:57 am:
This is really great! What a unique plot liine with such an interesting main character! Props to you. My only suggestion is to cut a lot of the dialogue and add in more detail! Great job overall!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 12 at 11:30 am :
Thank you so much. I appreciate it
 
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SarasotaWonderThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 30 at 7:36 pm:
You did such a good job with this! The plot is unique, interesting, and fast-paced...AWESOME JOB WITH THAT! :) One thing I would watch out for is that fact that you have a lot of dialouge, whcih you really don't need all the time, and some more description will thicken your story up. Also, say what the characters say out loud, does it sound like something you would here in everyday converstation or is it just awkward? Overal, great work!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jan. 30 at 8:06 pm :
Thanks so much! I'm working on being more descriptive and using less dialogue. I know that the balance is pretty out of wack
 
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TimekeeperThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 18 at 4:57 pm:
I'm totally digging the character names! You could definitely flesh out the story with more narrative to break up all of the dialogue, it will really add more meat to the story. When will you post more?
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jan. 18 at 6:29 pm :
Thanks so much, I like them too. I don't mean to sound full of myself there, sorry. And I'm working on improving my writing. I just went through a semester without an english class, so the quality of my writing went down. I'll post more as soon as I can. Probably about a week or so
 
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purple0528This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 8:07 pm:
when's chapter three coming up?? soon i hope! <3 ya jeb :))
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 8:14 pm :
Oh yeah...I forgot I hadn't submitted it yet. I'll do that now
 
purple0528This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 8:16 pm :
this isnt facebook...but like like like! ;DD
 
purple0528This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 8:34 pm :
awww...how long will it be offline?????
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 9:34 pm :
At least 3 days or so and up to a couple of weeks
 
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UNserieswriterThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 9, 2011 at 5:52 pm:
hey good stuff! be sure to check out my stuff too please!!!!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 8:14 pm :
Thanks and I did :)
 
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AngelsLullabyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 11:31 pm:
Great job! You did excellent with the description and i loved the word choice. Fantastic story!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 6:30 pm :
Thanks, I really appreciate it!
 
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IronmanJ3 said...
Nov. 15, 2011 at 10:09 pm:
This is pretty good from what I have read. I like it even though I am a non fiction reader and am not used to so many I's and me's. ha, keep up the good work.
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 16, 2011 at 7:25 am :
Wow, thanks! I'll try my best :)
 
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.Izzy. said...
Nov. 14, 2011 at 8:31 pm:
I LOVE this. Seriously, even though there wasn't a ton of description, your dialogue was great. I liked that you added humor, you had me smiling at some parts. I don't really have any criticism. 5 stars! Keep writing! 
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 14, 2011 at 9:54 pm :
Thanks a ton! And I definitely will keep writing :)
 
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JappyalldayeverydayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 6:06 pm:
This is really cool, I like it a lot :)
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 13, 2011 at 8:54 pm :
Thanks so much!
 
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JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:44 pm:
GOOD.! you're deserving!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:45 pm :
Deserving of what?
 
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JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:40 pm:
I wish I was half as creative as you..I mean this is CRAZY AMAZING!!!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:42 pm :
Jenny, you're gonna make me blush...
 
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JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:20 pm:
can't wait for more!!!!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:33 pm :
And again. Good to see you didn't forget about this account like I thought you would :) no offense
 
JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:34 pm :
:P thanks dude.
 
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JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:19 pm:
I LOVE RAT KEY!!!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:33 pm :
Thanks again Jenny
 
JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:36 pm :

anytime!......

..alllllllllllllllll the time...... O.o

 
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JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:19 pm:
MILFORCE IS THE BEST! 
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:32 pm :
Thanks Jenny...
 
JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:37 pm :
of course:P
 
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RatKeyFanatict said...
Nov. 6, 2011 at 7:25 pm:
This book is really cool!!!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 6, 2011 at 8:26 pm :
Thanks so much!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 6, 2011 at 8:26 pm :
I see you finally got around to getting an account here, Taylor :)
 
JennayBeanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:34 pm :
this right here? it makes me shmiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiile;]
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:35 pm :
It should, Jenny
 
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StrangeJadeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 5, 2011 at 10:49 pm:

(I'm so sorry it took me so long to comment... so much homework... PowerPoint of death.... blaaaaah.... but anyway.)

 

I only had time to read Chapter one right now, but I'm really enjoying it! The characters' syntax is fluid and believable, and the world seems very well-developed. There are a few grammar errors and some bits where the story slows down a tad too much, but these are relatively minor. All in all, it's a really promising story, and I look forward to more of it... (more »)

 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 6, 2011 at 7:25 am :
Thanks so much! I'll have the third chapter up soon!
 
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Steph0804This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 6:09 am:
I loved this chapter and how you introduced all the gangs! The "well" joke was really funny, too. Keep it up!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 7:16 am :
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked the 'well' joke. Honestly, I had to think about writing it because I was getting confused!
 
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Steph0804This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 6:08 am:
Wow! I'm already hooked! I love how you started with an action scene to keep the reader excited!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 3, 2011 at 7:15 am :
Thanks a bunch!
 
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purple0528This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 2, 2011 at 9:18 pm:
;) youre awesome! keep writing!!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 2, 2011 at 9:32 pm :
Haha, thanks again Nicole! Fancy meetin you here
 
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DamonSalvatore1864This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 2, 2011 at 12:26 pm:
Great job! You must've put a lot of effort into this and it shows!
 
milforceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Nov. 2, 2011 at 3:48 pm :
Thanks so much! I'm glad you can tell that I really tried my best on this!
 
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purple0528This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 2, 2011 at 8:15 am:
This is so good! I can't wait to read more! Thanks Jeb ;)
 
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