Autumnal MAG

May 25, 2013
By dreamshaker GOLD, Clarkston, Michigan
dreamshaker GOLD, Clarkston, Michigan
18 articles 0 photos 88 comments

It's been five years,
and I can't remember the exact color of your eyes
or the softness of your hands,
but I've never forgotten the way your face lit up
when you talked about autumn.

I don't remember the words to your favorite song
or the sound of your laughter,
but after all this time, I still see you sitting on that park bench,
still picture you kicking leaves
and charming tiny flames from the top of your lighter.
You would spin stories of a dying summer,
outline the birth of fall in shades of gold,
and recall harvests that always seemed too big for your delicate wording.

Five years later
and I still can't believe that you're gone.
I still find your coats
hanging
in the front closet,
the corpses of your cigarettes still lying quietly
where you thought I'd never find them.
I keep your lighter tucked in my own pocket
and I can't see it without thinking about the changing leaves,
bursts of oranges and reds like fire at our feet.

I'm still waiting for another autumn,
for another smiled story and crisp evening air.
I'm still waiting for you to need that coat,
to shiver next to me on a park bench
and pull that crinkled pack of ashes
from inside some hidden pocket.
I'm waiting for you to explain the note
you never left me,
the reasons you never gave,
and why my footprints seem so much smaller without you here

I'm still waiting for you to explain
why the autumns are so empty without your words,
and why it was so hard to make it here
without you.


The author's comments:
Five years later, and you still belong to autumn.

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on Oct. 16 2014 at 3:06 pm
dreamshaker GOLD, Clarkston, Michigan
18 articles 0 photos 88 comments
You are too sweet! Thank you so much for taking the time to leave me such a nice comment. :)

on Oct. 15 2014 at 3:58 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Eeek. This is aboslutely, beautiful and fantastic! I love this, so much. It has so much, emotion and descriptiveness and wonder. I don't know hwo to explain it, except that has a fall- air or atmosphere around it. It's just perfect. :D I'm so glad that is or was published; congrats because you truly deserve it! You are an amazing and talented writer. You have such a talent and greatness and light in you. Believe that, because it's true. I hope to read more of your writing soon! :) Thank you so much, for sharing this. :D

on Sep. 28 2014 at 7:38 pm
dreamshaker GOLD, Clarkston, Michigan
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Aww, thanks! I'm glad you like it! Thank you for taking the time to leave this comment, I love the feedback

on Sep. 28 2014 at 6:38 pm
The_Book_Thief GOLD, Brownville, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
"And when you gaze long enough into the abyss, the abyss will gaze back into you." - Friedrich Nietzsche

This is heartwrenching, and I love it. I could feel the cool air against my face as I read this, and I am completely wowed by your skill. Keep writing!

on Sep. 17 2014 at 6:35 pm
dreamshaker GOLD, Clarkston, Michigan
18 articles 0 photos 88 comments
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! :)

on Sep. 17 2014 at 5:12 pm
mrsperegrine GOLD, Stratham, New Hampshire
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WOAH! This is an absolutley exquisite poem! I love how you described autumn, especially the lines.."I keep your lighter tucked in my own pocket..and I can't see it without thinking about the chanigng leaves, bursts of organges and reds like fire at our feet...". I also love how you weaved in a story with such powerful emotion in this poem! Job well done :). 

on Sep. 9 2014 at 8:47 pm
dreamshaker GOLD, Clarkston, Michigan
18 articles 0 photos 88 comments
Thank you so much - your comment made my day. I don't get a lot of comments, especially not out of the blue, so it was really awesome to log on and see such great feedback. :)

I've looked through some of your poems, and I left you a couple comments (The Bridge & Darkness were the titles, I believe). My pleasure to offer feedback. Your poetry is very powerful. 

on Sep. 5 2014 at 10:46 pm
RainWashed PLATINUM, Park City, Utah
46 articles 1 photo 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Repeat the good and the bad. Do it all again. And pile on the years."

This is an amazing piece of art! I love how you spun a story with this poem. I also liked how you kept bringing the colors of autumn up without saying that it was autum. This was masterfully crafted. Extremely beautiful. Maybe you could check out some of my stuff and let me know what you think. I would love your feedback.


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