I found that the author Jill G. of “Shattered” is a good writer.  I think that you should have told your grandma to wear her seatbelt.  I think this because it could have saved her life.  I also think you should not curse in this story some young kids read this article and go saying it at school they can get in a lot of trouble. Also think of what your grandma is thinking right now that you have a potty mouth.  I have never been in this situation, but if I were I would have told my grandma to wear her seatbelt.  Also what is with all the stages?  I would think that this would all happen at once.  Also don’t be so graphic with the wreck because some people could be scared of blood and faint.  Also it could make someone scared to get in a car you could have just said car wreck.  But other than these statements I think that it was a lovely story.