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EbonyandIvory posted this thread...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 7:21 am

I always get stuck after the first few sentances. there is no limit!!!

Prompt:

An autumn breeze whisked thru the grove of trees. Akron was alone again. No mother to comfort him. His widower of a father put him up for foster care when he refused his Dad's girlfriend to be his stepmom. She was a stripper and a smoker. Akron had to save what was left of his dignity, but his father didn't see it that way. Nevertheless, he decided to put the past behind him, no questions asked. He picked up his guitar and played.

 

 

Can anyone continue? You will be mentioned in the book's completion

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Autumn_StarThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 12, 2012 at 10:29 am

What about something like...

 

He loved to play, to get lost in the music and forget everything around him. It was like something that no could understand, no one needed to understand except for him. The rustling of the leaves around him only added to the music, never taking away. Akron wasn't sure if there was anything that could take away from music. 

 

...How's that?

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EbonyandIvory replied...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 7:40 am

perfect! I'll mention you in my notes. Hmm....how to build off of that? Something ahs to disract him...any ideas?

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Autumn_StarThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 18, 2012 at 10:04 am

well, that depends on what kind of thing has to distract him. If it's a person a twig snapping would be appropriate because he is in a grove of trees. If something else just any noise would do or he forgot the note he was going to play or something like that.

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EbonyandIvory replied...
May 22, 2012 at 6:59 am

Yeah! Nothing could break him of his musical trance. All the stress in the world seemed to leave him. Even all the playing in the world, however, couldn't change his natural irratibility. As always in the forest, twigs snap and leaves fall. But it was quiet. All the leaves have already fallen and the wind was nearly as strong enough to knock off branches. Out of the quiet groove of the forest, and the gentle strum of the guitar, a huge limb fell off of a mighty Oak tree.

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EbonyandIvory replied...
Jul. 3, 2013 at 6:44 am

Anyone else?

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Superhero_Fan replied...
Jul. 7, 2013 at 3:00 pm

What about, instead of a limb, you could use the twig snapping after all. But it would be a girl who'd stepped on it.

If you don't like it, okay. But if you do, great! Have fun!

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EbonyandIvory replied...
Jul. 7, 2013 at 8:27 pm

sounds intresting! continue?

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Waistband replied...
Jul. 10, 2013 at 2:53 pm

If you are gonna use the girl then scratch the "a huge  limb fell off of a mighty oak tree" instead say: ...and the gentle strum of the guitar, a frantic rustle of leaves on the ground and the snapping of a twigs came from his distant right. Distracting him enough to miss his note. Annoyed and slightly nervous he jumped up and turned towards the direction of the noise to see a girl chasing her her red hat as it rolled across the ground being blown by the blustering wind. As he watched, the wind shifted and the hat began to barrel towards where he stood. Crouching down, careful not to damage his guitar he snatched up the hat as the girl rustled noisly up to him. He stood up trying to look as respectful as he could he held out the hat to her. "Your hat Miss...." His mouth froze and his eyes widened. Before him stood the most beautiful girl he had ever seen. She stood before him wearing a scarlet red coat the same color as the hat he held in his hand and blue skin tight pants. (Add in whatever you would describe the features of the most beautiful girl you could imagine would be)  "Uhhh h-hello. M-my name is Akron." he stammered as he stared at her perfection. "I think you dropped this."

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EbonyandIvory replied...
Jul. 17, 2013 at 6:46 pm

Love It! wanna continue?

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Waistband replied...
Aug. 5, 2013 at 1:56 am

ok haha. :)   
 
The beautiful girl giggles and blushes faintly. "Thank you" she replies, taking the hat gracefully from Akron's hands and placing it firmly atop her head."My name is Cecilia". She continued as she smiled brightly,revealing teeth as white as pearls and perfectly straight. She holds her hand out waiting for him to shake it  "Nice to meet you." Says Cecilia. "The pleasure is all mine" replied Akron, taking her hand in his and giving her an enthusiastic and firm handshake, taking great comfort from her voice. Her sweet, smooth, soothing voice. "I dont think I've ever seen you before. Are you from around here?" asked Akron. "No I just moved here and I decided to take a walk around town while I waited for the movers to finish bringing in my stuff. That's when I came acrossed this lovely grove and the wind blew and lead my hat to you it seems." Smiled Cecilia.  "So I guess it has." Akron smiled back. 



I suggest that for the next part you either lead them into a conversation about the guitar and then he plays a bit for her and then they head into town to a coffe shop or something to get to know each other better. Or they head into town to a coffee shop or something to talk and they learn about each other more and then lead into a conversation about the guitar and music (this seems like it was kind of a focal point in your story).  Then after you choose one of those you can either A) go to one of there apartments where they hang out and Akron plays some music number for her. (maybe she falls asleep listening to it or afterwards while they are together?) or she can say no that she can't because she needs to settle things at her apartment and gives him her number to call. Or you can make something come up and she leaves suddenly without giving him her number and the story becomes about his music and his search for Cecilia while his music and career grows. (Btw a little sidenote you should make cecilia and his music create friction at some point for a major conflict. Like he mmight have to go far away or something)

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