Send me your pece and I'll be happy to read it and critique it for you. :)
you will seriously regret offering that in about three minutes.
but since you asked....
here's a poem i wrote. usually i'm much more down to earth then that, my poems are usually less flowery and philosiphical, so i was always embarrassed to show it to people.
but the great thing about internet is that you don't know me, i don't know you, and as long as your not a creepy internet stalker, i think i can trust you with this weird poem of mine.
This is a nothing poem.
Or maybe it’s
Could be this
Poem holds the secrets
In it’s verses.
If you can,
Then either you
Have figured out
What makes the world
Or, the more likely: you
Am I crazy?
What am I?
What if my whole
Life is a
If you go to my page I would love for you to read my newest piece, "100 People"
Thanks a million
Could ya read my poem Daniel?
I'm Jade :)
^^ lol. EbraceURawesomeness, you are crazy :)
This is pretty good. I actually wrote a poem somewhat similar to this once, but I had no idea how to finish it. I can't tell if the "Lalalalalalala" is part of the poem, but it should be. Haha :) Also, the lines "Could be this/Poem holds the secrets" are kind of confusing. It sounds like maybe you left out some words? Or put them in the wrong order? I understand what you are trying to say, it just sounds very very awkward and I had to read it over a few times.
Also, the last three lines don't feel like they fit with the rest of the poem. They are so deep. The rest of the poem is kind of deep, kind of silly. But then all of a sudden- BAM! What is life? Do you get whatI mean? I hope so. Haha. Other than those few things, it's really a very good peom. I like it a lot.
Wait, no, I'm so confused about how this is supposed to work. My last comment was for EbraceURaewsomeness. Haha
I'd greatly appreciate any feedback you're open to give! Don't worry about me if you don't have time. (:
Can you please comment on this
Could you read my article "The Inedible School Lunch"?
I'd appreciate your feedback on any of my works. reviews or poems or both. Doesn't matter. You'll make my day.
Please read haunted (TeenInk.com/nonfiction/personal_experience/article/539284/Haunted/)
i just figured out a very important fact, guys.
i discovered that in order to know if people replied to your reply, you have to actually go back to the thread, it doesn't just pop up for you.
so here i am, finally discovering that someone enjoyed my crazy poem.
thank you CarolineStarr, and RarelyJaded, thanks too... (i think?)
I love this poem lol I like the humor in it greatly made me smile when I finished reading
I would appreciate it if you read my poems and non fiction on my page. Thanks a thousand!
If you could read that, or any of my other work, It will make my day :)
If you could read/rate/comment on any of my things, especially "Becoming Someone", it will make my day :) thanks!
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I have 3 pieces. Alzheimer's, All is Forgiven, and Harry Potter Obsession. You can read those if you would like to. I appreciate feedback/comments/rates.(:
I also have two poems soon to be accepted.
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