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bubblee96This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Jan. 2, 2013 at 6:57 pm

Don't be this girl; the one who is writing this.
Be better.
Stop letting everyone tell you what to do and when to do it.
Stand up for yourself.
Make a statement, make a scene, do something.
Stop letting people walk all over you.
You're being crushed under the weight.
I can feel it, I can see it.
Stop pushing everyone away because you don't want them to see your faults and failures.
Stop treating yourself like you aren't good enough.
Stop looking at yourself like you want to change everything that isn't perfect.
Stop.
Look at yourself with open eyes and not hatred.
Leave him behind.
He isn't good enough if he can't tell you what he wants.
Stop crying every time you read his words or hear your song or look at pictures of him.
You don't have him, you never did.
Realize that and get over it.
Stop being the girl you wish you weren't.
Change.

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CreativeClaire replied...
Jan. 3, 2013 at 12:05 am

I like this piece! The last two lines are my favorite; I think that they will inspire who ever reads this. I can relate to this piece, the way you are speaking to yourself is very similar to the way I speak to myself.
The main part of this piece that confuses me is that the title is "Dear Future Me" while you seem to be speaking to your present self. The first two lines seem to be directed toward your future self, but then after those, you seem to slip into giving your current situation the attention. This seems like it was a more natural subject for you to write about. The title just doesn't seem to fit with the actual piece. Maybe you could try leaving out the "future" aspect of the title.
I liked how in the middle of the piece you drew attention to your starting the lines with "stop" by simply printing "stop" again as the only word on the next line. When I saw that I noticed the pattern that you had been using and found that trick to be very clever.

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AnanditaKetkar replied...
Jan. 8, 2013 at 5:29 am

Amazing poem, really well structured! This is really powerful and uplifting, well done!

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EyeWrite2See replied...
Jan. 30, 2013 at 11:06 am

I like the piece because its truthful and honest wityh nothing else to it. Lovely!

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bubblee96This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 26, 2013 at 6:44 pm

Thank you so much for this comment, I really enjoy hearing things like this because it means I'm doing something right :) And I understand what you're saying about the title and I agree to some extent but I sort of write this just as a reminder to myself to keep looking at when times get tough and so by calling it "Dear Future Me" it connects with the fact that not all change comes suddenly and this sort of self improvement has to be gradual and that most of it will happen in the future...I just wanted to give you some insight on why I called it what I did!

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