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writerauterThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Dec. 28, 2012 at 8:01 pm

you know that feeling when its just you and him
when time stops and you can hardly breathe
you know that moment when you feel like flying
when nothings wrong and you just feel so happy
that second when you believe that he'll never leave
you know that's the very second the fall begins.
 
i know his smile keeps your head spinning
i see how your knees get weak when hes around
i know his good looks and abs drive you wild
i see how you silently swear to do anything for him
i have to warn you now before its too late
take a second and think about it all
think about your heart, shattered on the floor
look into his beautiful sparkling blue eyes
think to yourself, is he telling the truth?
if the answer ends in doubt, don't trust fall into him
if the answer is no, don't give away all you have to him
take a few minutes, before your swept away
think about your heart.
 
you know that feeling when he holds you close
when sparks fly every time he says your name
you know that moment when you feel like fainting
when he whispers i love you and everything great
the minute you believe he'd never ever hurt you
you know that's the second the trouble begins.
 
i know his sweet words keep you all relaxed
i see how you hold your breath when he walks by
i know his cool clothes and hair makes you crazy
i see how you promise yourself that you will love him
i have to warn you now before its too late
take a second and think it all over
think about your heart, broken into pieces
look away from him for a long moment
think to yourself, is he really a good idea for you?
if the answer is confident, take a chance and fall into him
if the answer is a yes, give him what you are comfortable with
take a little bit, don't decide right away
just think about your heart.
 
i see that you are walking alone now
around and around the school
i heard he left you for someone else
i hope your doing alright...i really do
i know how hard it is...i really understand
you believed in him with your whole heart
but he let you down and tore you all apart
one thing that i do know...
there is a lot to learn from a broken heart
you will see things about him you couldn't before
and you can finally take some time to rest
and just really think about your heart
think about your heart.

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Allicat001 replied...
Dec. 31, 2012 at 6:56 pm

I honestly think this was one of the best poems I've read here on TI, and a one that I could really relate to at that.  It had a nice flow and was full of emotion.  The only thing I noticed was that you tended not to capitalize your "I"s and didn't capitalize the first word to every line.  Otherwise, this was a fantastic poem, great job! :)

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