lights fade to darkness
everthing turns quiet
i see your face in the shadows
just waitng to come out
smiles fade to sadness
as i realze why your here
dont you know how much it hurts?
tell me that its my fault
so it must be true
tell me that im worthless
but that i should always love you
the pain fades to depression
as the years went on by
my heart turned to melted stone
from the absence of love in my life.
wont somebody come save me?
doesnt anybody care?
that a broken soul is crying
in the depths of deep dispair
doesnt anyone hear the yelling?
why isnt anybody there?
i must have done somthing wrong here
but i just cant figure what it is i did
someone please save me
before i drown myself
in the red blood of my heart
all because of the absence of love.
There are great ideas in this peice, but I really reccommend fixing all the grammer errors. For example, "i" should be "I", "realze" is "realize", and words like "won't", "you're", "doesn't", and "I'm" need apostrophes. Basic grammer has the power to make or break a piece, so if taken into consideration, this will be even better! :)
Ah, I despise myself for that last comment. Grammar* is what I meant to type. :)