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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Jun. 10, 2013 at 11:19 pm

Kay, so: rearrange the following run-on sentence to make it poetry.

Rules: you can use a word more than once but you cannot use a word that is not in the sentence.



It was essential that she found herself on that starlit evening, one so young but darkening quickly, because if she had not, what would the world be without the laughter of the darling Miss Isabel?

Enjoy :P

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kikixkupkake replied...
Jun. 13, 2013 at 12:11 am

This is way out of my comfort zone and I am doubting myself a LOT here. If it is horrible, please tell me so I don't do this again xD thanks. And with that, I present a free verse poem. (Oh, God, why am I doing this?).



One had found herself,
Darkening quickly.
Without laughter,

What would she be?
Miss Isabel, if the darling,
Would be essential.

If she had not,

Would not,
Be darkening the world, She would be darkening one.

Miss Isabel would be darkening herself.

So she found herself one evening.

And without laughter that evening,
She was darling.
What was the world?
Not starlit.
...darkening.

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kikixkupkake replied...
Jun. 13, 2013 at 12:13 am

I don't know why the spacing did that! I'm sorry!

One had found herself,
Darkening quickly.
Without laughter,
What would she be?
Miss Isabel, if the darling,
Would be essential.
If she had not,
Would not,
Be darkening the world,
She would be darkening one.
Miss Isabel would be darkening herself.
So she found herself one evening.
And without laughter that evening,
She was darling. What was the world?
Not starlit.
...darkening.

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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jun. 13, 2013 at 10:06 am

Thank you for replying! :) and I really like the ending to your poem.


Oh, and I forgot to add prizes:

1st place: I'll rate and comment on four poems.

2nd place: three poems.

3rd place: two.

Thanks again! :)

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TargonTheDragonThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jun. 13, 2013 at 6:55 pm

i really liked this ending! great job!

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GreekGoddessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jun. 15, 2013 at 5:48 pm

So much fun!!!! I make mine later tonight!

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DifferentTeenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 25, 2013 at 12:52 pm

Miss Isabel,
So young.
 
She found herself,
Essential to the world.
 
Miss Isabel,
So without laughter.
 
That starlit evening,
Was darkening so quickly.
 
Mis Isabel,
So darling.
 
But not because she had,
Found the world.

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DifferentTeenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 25, 2013 at 1:05 pm

This comment box is seriously messing up and I can't fix my poem. Kindly forgive me for the "Mis Isabel" instead of "Miss".
And I would like to change the ending to,
 
'But not because,
She had found the world.'

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Suppression replied...
Jul. 26, 2013 at 10:12 pm

On that starlit evening she found herself
one so young but darkening quickly
if she had not but what would the world be
so essential she found herself
so quickly she would be without the world
if she had not
the darling Miss Isabel
without the laughter of one so young
without the world
if she had not
but if she had not
what would the world be.

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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jul. 27, 2013 at 11:49 am

Thanks for your submission! :)

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BrisaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 27, 2013 at 4:53 am

she found herself, Miss Isabel, so young






on one evening of starlit laughter.
it was essential she had,
with the world darkening so quickly.
because, if she had not,

that darling world would not be.

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BrisaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 27, 2013 at 4:57 am

Sonofabiscuit... the spacing. Why is it always the spacing.

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BrisaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 27, 2013 at 4:59 am

she found herself, Miss Isabel, so young





on one evening of starlit laughter. it was essential she had, with the world darkening so quickly.
because, if she had not, that darling world would not be.

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BrisaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 27, 2013 at 5:02 am

You know what? Please accept my first submission as being my contribution. At least all the breaks are in the right place. Just the spacing is ridiculous and it's making an OCD Klaxon alarm go off in my head, complete with flashing red lights. Thanks for understanding :)

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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 27, 2013 at 10:56 am

Okay! So, thanks everyone for your poems...and sorry it's taken so long to wrap this up, but not many people were submitting.



1st place: Brisa ....I thought yours was the most coherent out of all of them, and it made sense both grammatically and logically. I'll read 4 things of yours, if you have anything specific, let me know (:
2nd place: suppression .....I really enjoyed yours, too, nice job (:


3rd: kikixkupkake (cool name btw)


Aaaaaaand, heck, I liked all of yours, so DifferentTeen, I've made a fourth place,

Everybody let me know what they'd like me to read (:

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BrisaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 27, 2013 at 7:37 pm

Hey Jade, I have a few pieces that I'd love your feedback on :) "falcon", "blue base", and "Concert". As for the fourth, just go for whatever looks interesting, haha. Muchas gracias!

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