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RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Apr. 2, 2013 at 1:36 am

Rules:
 
Write one poem (any length/style) that includes these five words......
 
Embedded + mirror + kaleidoscope + lyric + vine
 
There MUST be creativity, effort, and a deep meaning behind every entry. Also, only A.M.A.Z.I.N.G haikus will be considered to win.
 
Subject: World Hunger
 
Winners:
1st place: comments/ratings on 5 works
2nd place: comments/ratings on 4 works
3rd place: comments/ratings on 3 works
 
MAXIMUM OF 10 entries

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KatsK replied...
Apr. 2, 2013 at 5:12 pm

Ha. Ha. As if I'd be able to write a haiku like that. I'll submit a poem later today, once I think of something super-deep. Which, obviously, takes several hours. :)

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KatsK replied...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 1:23 pm

You stare up at me, shallow bodies and kaleidoscope eyes sadness embedded in your mothers' frail movements because you don't know that you could die lyrics twist around my head do something make a difference I watch your starving eyes absorb the barren dirt as if it holds beauty and run around, playing tag like nothing else matters I look in the mirror vines wind a tangled web of lies around me It's not your fault You're powerless You're Barely Scraping By I touch my high cheekbones, watch my dark almond eyes flicker I was a starving child in Africa who didn't get any of the sandwiches they refused to eat in a better world I am one of you, one of the many entrenched in desperation, reeking of poverty and sweat I ate mud in arid weather, hoping I would live another day

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KatsK replied...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 1:24 pm

Okay, the formatting's messed up. Should I submit it on TI and put up a message here once it's uploaded, or...?

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RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 8:28 pm

Sure :P. It it's not a hassle

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GreekGoddessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 9:08 pm

 
A strand
To his pulse
A crumb
For his life
An embedded love
For the things you take
A lyric so rare
Happiness unknown
A twisted vine
On which you ignore
On which he drowns
A kaleidoscope for the world
A blend a mix
A broken mirror
Is where he stands
You are the image shown

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GreekGoddessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 3, 2013 at 9:16 pm

Alright let me explain:
 
"A strand
To his pulse" - His life is hanging on by a strand
"A crumb
For his life" - Without a crumb, he dies
"An embedded love
For the things you take" - He has an everlasting love for food, which the rich just have
"A lyric so rare
Happiness unknown" - A song is never heard, he has not heard of happiness
"A twisted vine
On which you ignore
On which he drowns" - He is conected to the rest of humanity, because they are all people, he suffers from it, they strive in it
"A kaleidoscope for the world
A blend a mix" - People see the world as a happy place, blending together all sides
"A broken mirror
Is where he stands
You are the image shown" - You are the oppisite of him
 
"You" refers to all the rich people, they people who take food for granted. "He" refers to the people who get by on a crumb of bread a day.

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Apr. 3, 2013 at 10:29 pm

The pain evident
So common within him
It is embedded within his face
Deep beneath each distorted expression
A rumble in his empty stomach
A note heard so often
He could make it a lyric
If he had the nourishment to do so
A shattered mirror
Glass beneath his bony feet
Where all who look on
See their own faces
Looking back at his
Guilt like a vine
Reaches for the passive
For those who have yet to see
The millions of people
Who know they are alone
To face the only enemy they know
The hollow emptiness
Where their features should be
You cannot fight an enemy from within
You cannot fight an enemy that is nothing
So we must make it something
And help them fight it off

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RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 2:08 am

Wow guys how will I ever pick a winner?????

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GreekGoddessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 4:46 pm

We love to torture you with desisions Jade :) just kidding.

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RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 6:54 pm

Haha no u really do :P

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GreekGoddessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 4, 2013 at 8:23 pm

Was it okay that I put an explaination of the poem after it? I felt that it wouldn't make any sense without an explation.

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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 8, 2013 at 10:13 pm

it was very helpful :)
 
Bump!

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KatsK replied...
Apr. 9, 2013 at 1:06 pm

Okay, mine is in my profile, titled Desperation. I don't *think* mine needs an explanation....

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 9, 2013 at 9:54 am

I hope I'm not too late to post in this thread.
 
I lay here in this semi-circle,
Feeling dead,
Knowing I will soon be embedded in the earth.
My gaze splintered like a kaleidoscopes,
But I still see my pain mirrored in their eyes.
A gnawing monster,
Growing in my stomach.
I feel like a vine,
Tying them to life.
Every piece of food I have had,
I have given.
But it is still not enough,
For soon we will all be embedded in the cold earth.




The door opens,
A man walks in.
To me,
The eldest,
He hands more food.
Enough food to spare me.
My pain is too great,
To hear his words.
Blurred lyrics to a life-saving song.
I take the food,
And crawl away.
To my friends I give,
The food.
I know that it is enough,
And that there is no more for me.
Feeling dead,
I close my eyes,
Allow the darkness that I have held at bay some long come,
And waiting to be embedded in the cold earth.
 
 

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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 9, 2013 at 6:50 pm

Not too late....I'll get to this later

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 9, 2013 at 6:54 pm

Thank you.

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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 10, 2013 at 8:14 pm

WOW ......i'm actually speechless. this was sooooo good i can't even describe, i loved it. Dragon is winning so far! need a few more entries..

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 11, 2013 at 10:46 am

Jade, or, anyone who read this, really, I need your help. I would like to post my entry for the contest to TeenInk, but I don't have a name for it. Any ideas?

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Jade.I.AmThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 11, 2013 at 6:18 pm

How about "I Give My Life?"

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