Sept. 5, 2013 at 2:32 am
Okay so I posted my work on this forum and here's the link: TeenInk.com/forums?act=post&topic_id=17&thread_id=76570
Sept. 5, 2013 at 2:33 am
Okay so I posted my work on this forum. The Thread is titled "Help In Editing and Proof Reading". Because that's eaxctly what I need
Oct. 30, 2013 at 5:52 pm
If you could look at my short story For Forever and Always that would be great. It is EXTREMELY SHORT. ANd if you have time could you please look at my song Love Like War. Thank you!!
Nov. 1, 2013 at 10:12 am
Could you please look at my article The Moment I Knew? It's a short story. Thank you so much!
Nov. 11, 2013 at 11:19 am
Hi can I have feedback on my short story "The Jabberwock"?
Nov. 13, 2013 at 9:00 am
Mine is not really an article, but a forum post as it's not "approved" quite yet. If you would like to look at it, it's titled Death is Beautiful. If you would like me just to post it here, please let me know. Thank you for doing this :)
Nov. 13, 2013 at 9:01 am
oh and it's either a short story or free verse poem; I am unclear.
Nov. 13, 2013 at 6:44 pm
I am in the middle of writing a fictional story called "The New Beginning," if you could look it over and give me that detailed feedback on it so far, that would be great! Thank you very much!
Nov. 14, 2013 at 8:54 pm
If you could please look at my short story called Long Lost? It's recently been published on profile. Thanks! =)
Dec. 1, 2013 at 4:27 pm
@LaChouette
I read and commented on both your story and your poem. They were realllllyyyy good! (:
Dec. 1, 2013 at 4:59 pm
@None0
I read and commented on the first chapter of your novel (not the prologue). It was brilliantly written. I liked the way that you used both characters' point of views in the chapter and gave a solid idea of the characters' personalities all in the first chapter!
Dec. 3, 2013 at 10:03 am
I would really like some feedback on my recent stuff, if you comment on mine i will coment on yours!!
Dec. 3, 2013 at 10:57 pm
@writtenmusic202
Your descriptions are really well elaborated. You paint a perfect picture for the reader to visualize. A couple things that you should work on are grammar and spelling in a couple of areas because sometimes it conveys a different message from what you're trying to say. It's a little unclear as to what the story is about so if you could give the reader a slight clue, it would be much appreciated. But overall, I think you're metaphors were spot on and were quite unique. Well done! (:
Dec. 3, 2013 at 11:00 pm
@None0
I read and commented on the first chapter of your novel (not the prologue). It was brilliantly written. I liked the way that you used both characters' point of views in the chapter and gave a solid idea of the characters' personalities all in the first chapter!
Dec. 3, 2013 at 11:01 pm
@LaChouette
I read and commented on both your story and your poem. They were realllllyyyy good! (:
Dec. 11, 2013 at 10:32 am
Hey:) can you look at my article "You Really Love Me?" Thanks!!
Dec. 26, 2013 at 1:04 pm
Could you please check out my piece, The Master? And specifically what piece would you like me to check out? Thank you!
Dec. 27, 2013 at 10:46 pm
Hi, I'd appreciate it if you would read and rate my article Azonto Invasion.
Jan. 6 at 9:10 pm
I have read and commented on every article mentioned above. Everyone had really great stories and I'm amazed to be reading, and sometimes critiquing, stories written by such talented people! You all have definitely inspired me and I have learned a lot from you all's work. To everyone, I give a hearty, earnest, and well deserved round of applause. *clap, clap*
@swansong
couldn't find the "Truth about expectations" so i read sinners just the same and read and commented on a cry in the dark.
@tanazMasaba
i really liked your story but I would recommend not using the preface. It felt like you were just dumping a lot of information on the reader at once and then asking them to apply it to the first chapter. Instead, insert little bits of information as you go on through the story. I think that will be more beneficial to you and the reader. There were a few awkward sentences here and there but that can be fixed with some rereading. Overall, I really like the idea and I'm interested in seeing where you take the story from there. Great job! (:
@rocky-patton
sorry. i didnt really understand the jabberwock maybe because I just couldnt connect the pieces so I read and commented on Editor's Choice and the Snowflake
@allhallowsevekatie
i read and commented on Ghosts of Relationships Past.
@stormy9890
Any story that catches your eye is fine. Thanks~
Jan. 8 at 9:47 am
Okay, thank you for doing this! I need critic urgently.
I need constructive critisism (not just good job) for the poem "The Color Red", "Clipped Wings of Innocence" and "Music" along with the short story "Pasture of Sanity and Reason" and the forum "Connect the Dots" I know that is a lot, but I am on a deadline and need to finalize these! Thank you again!
