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The Valley of The Dolls.

dragonsandthree replied...
May 9, 2013 at 9:02 pm

Of course I am! I am going to put it in the aurthor's note because that will be seen in every chapter.

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 9, 2013 at 9:02 pm

I am really glad that I have spellcheck on the computer! :)

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LexusMarie replied...
May 9, 2013 at 11:34 pm

Okay! Thank you! I will talk to you tomorrow.

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 10, 2013 at 5:25 pm

Lexus, do you think that you could write another poem for Adelle? One where she thinks that the freedom that she is getting by going to the Valley and loving Leo is false?

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LexusMarie replied...
May 10, 2013 at 8:22 pm

One about her love for Leo AND the freedom being false? Yes, I think so!

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LexusMarie replied...
May 10, 2013 at 9:04 pm

You're all I could ever ask for and freedom is within
so why do I feel like this needs to come to an end?
I feel that if I tell you I'll be a temple full of treason
when on the contrary you gave me no good reason.
Are the images I see an oracle of lies
or could they just be a fever in my doubtful mind?
My naive soul is slowly eating me alive
I need to know if this is all a disguise.
I am beginning to lose the suppleness of truth,
starting to think false of freedom and you.
The valley must simply be a myth
I feel like my heart has been cut with a scythe.
Why did this life-saver, this lovely place
become such misery and make my life an empty space?
The doubts are quickly taking over
just like a meadow filled with little clovers.
You have both given me vibrant and loving hope
but I am afraid this may become a memory I loathe.
 
 
 
Okay, so, that's what I came up with. I hope you like it.
 
 
 

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 10, 2013 at 9:25 pm

It's brilliant! Thanks!

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 10, 2013 at 10:33 pm

Lexus, do you like reading romances?

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LexusMarie replied...
May 11, 2013 at 11:14 am

Hey there, I do! I stumble upon them from time to time and I enjoy them. I don't see romances very often. I know there is a section for them, but I try to just find people's work by getting lost on this website. But, yes, I love them.

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 11, 2013 at 11:30 am

Okay@ I was wondering because I am trying to write a romance novel for the first time, and I was wonderingm if you had the time, if you would read over it.

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 11, 2013 at 11:32 am

Okay. I was wondering because I am trying to write a romance novel for he first time and wondered if you had any tips in any way.

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LexusMarie replied...
May 11, 2013 at 1:05 pm

Yeah, I think so. So, the first thing is to try not to follow other romantic story-lines because people get tired of the same love stories. Now, once you have come up with a good original story-line, write a 100-150 word outline of your novel where you will include your heros, characters, jobs, setting, etc. Here try to come up with how long you want it to be, as far as chapters and words. (Most novels at the minimum contain 60,000 words.) Now that you thought of your characters and such, think of the problem that keeps the hero from getting the heroine. Think of events that really make this story romantic. Give them believable dialogue with some cheesy stuff, but don't over-do it. I like stories that have hooks in the beginning, so try to do that. And it does not have to completely stick with the outline you came up with, but follow it from time to time. And make sure that you end it well, readers love the ending of a book and they tend to get attached to the characters, so make sure that whether the ending is happy/sad/both that it was good. Oh and make sure that your title is interesting, I have done research on how to come up with a good title when I was struggling and the one I really liked was to go to Amazon and the books section and find about 20 books in the same genre as yours and write them down. Tear the titles apart and find what you like about them and what you don't. Get ideas off of them. Mix them together. Look at the covers of those books if you want, maybe they will give you inspiration. So, that's all I have for tips for romantic novels. I hope that helps!

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 11, 2013 at 2:08 pm

Yeah, thanks!

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LexusMarie replied...
May 11, 2013 at 2:11 pm

Sure thing.

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 12, 2013 at 9:33 am

Lexus, the first chapter is up! The Valley of the Dolls is in the fantsy novel section.

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LexusMarie replied...
May 12, 2013 at 6:24 pm

Yay! Have you considered going to the forums and the fiction section and asking for feedback so far on the first chapter? And how is the next chapter going?
 
Happy Mother's Day to your family.

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 12, 2013 at 6:51 pm

Thank you! And the second chapter is going good. I've been a bit sidelined by other project, but I should be finished with the next chapter soon.

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LexusMarie replied...
May 12, 2013 at 9:47 pm

Great. I have a new poem up!

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 13, 2013 at 8:17 am

Cool! I'll go check it out.

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LexusMarie replied...
May 13, 2013 at 9:57 am

Thanks, talk to you this afternoon.

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