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Yeah, That Girl is Me

SecretFlame posted this thread...
May 1, 2013 at 1:59 am

Just came up with this tonight. Sorry if it's cr*p. I'm feelin a little low and just unmotivated. 
 
Yeah, That Girl is Me
 


The girl that cries alone,


Over things others would deem stupid,


Insignificant?


Yeah,


That girl’s me.


The girl that procrastinates,


Puts it all off,


And hates herself for it?


Yeah,


That girl’s me.


The girl who has a chain of friends,


Five thousand feet long.


But still feels alone half the time?


Yeah,


That girl’s me.


The girl who has golden grades,


But freaks out over anything below a 93%,


Even though she didn’t work for it?


Yeah,


That girl’s me.


The girl who knows,


Thinks,


Believes,


Hopes,


Prays,


She could do anything,


But stills falls back into the same old,


Ever repeating circle?


Yeah,


That girl’s me.


The girl who knows she’s got it good,


A not completely dysfunctional family,


Friends who’ve got her back,


But still feels scared,


Of life and living,


Of the thing’s she might be missing,


Of chances taken,


And chances left forgotten and never used?


Yeah,


That girl’s me.


The girl who wallows in a mud hole of self pity,


Over one thing,


But will leap to the fight,


Bristling to defend herself over another?


Yeah,


That girl’s me.


The girl who accepts herself,


But can’t always deal with herself,


Her emotions, her dreams, her under achievements?


Yeah,


That girl’s me.


That girl who know’s she’s not perfect,


Who struggles with how to see herself,


And can’t always remember there is a future,


And that life will keep going,


Inexorably surging like the sea,


But then remembers to look forward,


Calms down,


And plods ahead,


Barely keeping balance,


On a tightrope of uncertainty?


Yeah,
That girl is definitely me.
 

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dragonsandthree replied...
May 1, 2013 at 5:55 pm

This was really good and interesting.

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AmarisHellfang replied...
May 2, 2013 at 5:18 pm

I feel like part of these lines sometimes.

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KrasotaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 2, 2013 at 5:45 pm

I love the lines "And that life will keep going/inexorably surging like the sea." Excellent job!

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KenyaLove41This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 4, 2013 at 5:53 pm

Hey, I really enjoyed this. It's very orignial and relatable. My favorite lines have to be when you start bringing in comparisons in at the end "Inexorably surging like the sea,                            But then  remembers to look forward,

Calms down,

And plods ahead,

Barely keeping balance,

On a tightrope of uncertainty?" I would suggest that you do that throughout the whole piece to give it more depth and realy take it home but other that I really enjoyed it.(:





 

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