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Which sounds better?

MidnightFire posted this thread...
Apr. 1, 2013 at 11:11 pm

This is a thread where people can post their questions on word phrases and their peers and I will attempt to help.
I'll go first with an example: Say I wish to put 'most tender' and my computer's spell/grammar check says I should put 'tenderest' which sounds better.
See, it's pretty easy. Now it's your turn! :)

P.S. ... is tenderest even a word?

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Allicat001 replied...
Apr. 2, 2013 at 3:46 pm

This is a good idea! Okay so I was wondering, which title sounds better to you: To Catch Me or To Catch a Calipher? I know it’s a subtle difference but it’s been bugging me for awhile :P

P.S. According to Dictionary.com, ‘tenderest’ is a word. :)

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MidnightFire replied...
Jun. 15, 2013 at 3:03 pm

Wow, I haven't been on here in a long time... I'd probably go with To Catch a Calipher because then it draws in someone who doesn't know anything about the book :) I hope this isn't too late though I bet it is, sorry.

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None0 replied...
Jun. 15, 2013 at 9:18 pm

Word phrases I need help with:
 
Black/Dark _____ (Something to do with a storm. Currently using "maelstrom", but it doesn't feel quite right)
 
Light ____ (It's supposed to be a beam, but I don't like how "light beam", or "beam of light" sounds. Currently using "pillar", but then it gives it a vertical feel instead of horizontal)
 
______ burst of power (I'm using "oblitoric", which sounds right, but isn't proper grammer)
 
God_____ (Godling? Demigod? God Spawn? Something that implies godly origin)
 
Sphere of darkness (Same problem as "beam of light". Just... ugh)
 
Tendrils of power (Another "beam of light" issue)
 
Gray ooze (Need a synonym-phrase)
 
Justice Conception (This needs to be reworked entirely. It's the title for my next novel, but as you can probably tell, it's terrible)
 
Hope that isn't too much.

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Superhero_Fan replied...
Jul. 6, 2013 at 11:49 am

I'm not midnightfire, but I'll try to help. 

First, dark maelstrom souds really cool, but I don't know what you're using it for, so I can't really help.

Second, What about a RAY of light?

Third, I have no idea on the power thing. But for the one about god, how about omnipotent?

Fourth, does the darkness have to be a shape? Or can it just be inky black?

'Tendrils of power' make me think of an octopus for some reason. I have the same problem on this one as the first one.

Gray ooze.  Hmmmm. Slimy gray substance?

Justice Conception. Okay, I have no idea what this is about, but I want to read it! Here's my title for it: 

Keeper of Justice. (This might not be what you're looking for, but I thought it sounded cool! Oh, and 'Keeper' can be plural.)

Hope this helps!

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None0 replied...
Jul. 6, 2013 at 6:30 pm

I guess Dark Maelstrom works fine in context. I was thinking of genies at the time, so that was probably what I felt was wrong. (MtG, Maelstrom Djinn)
 
No, it's more solid than a ray. More like a laser, but not quite a laser since it's magical.
 
I'm going to stick with oblitoric and make it a term.
 
I need a noun for the god one. It's going to be a proper noun/term.
 
Tendril-related things are all difficult. Unless they have a color, then I can say something like Green Tendrils or whatever.
 
The ooze is like a living thing. Substance doesn't really have that alive feel. Although Slime might work... I'll have to figure out the right adjectives to use here.
 
The novel is really more about the ideal rather than the people, and there aren't really any people in the novel that can be called the "keeper(s) of justice" (everyone's in it for themselves more or less). It's the sequel to my novel City of the Doomed, if you wanted to know.
 
I appreciate the help.

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Superhero_Fan replied...
Jul. 9, 2013 at 2:02 pm

Well, if you aren't going to use the title, then I will! Thanks for saying no!

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Superhero_Fan replied...
Aug. 3, 2013 at 9:17 pm

Okay, now I've got one. I'm in title trouble! Which one?
Worst of Both Worlds,
Or,
Trapped Between Two Worlds.
It's about a boy who get's trapped between the good guys and the bad guys, and has to find his way out of the mess he accedentally got himself into. Thanks!

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None0 replied...
Aug. 4, 2013 at 11:13 pm

Hmm, I'd say When Worlds Collide would work best, but that sounds a little cliche. Both those titles feel like they have a word missing, like if you change one word, the whole title would just click. Although if it were a choice, I'd go with the first one.
 
And, I just realized that City of the Doomed sounds a whole lot like a rip-off from the Mortal Instruments series. Going to need a new title now... (thinking of calling it Project Akenschuave, but that would leave readers kind of confused).

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Superhero_Fan replied...
Aug. 5, 2013 at 12:48 pm

Thanks None! I was thinking about the 'worst of both worlds' because of the saying the 'best of both worlds'. I can't do your title, because it doesn't work with my story. I didn't elaborate on my story much, because I'm going to ask you to review it when I'm done! 
And I think City of The Doomed​, is a good title. Then again, I haven't read the series you were talking about, so I'm not really qualified to say it doesn't make yours look like a knock-off.

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