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Xenolith posted this thread...
Jan. 29, 2013 at 3:59 pm

I’ve decided to write an actual novel and stick with it.  I have just over 1,000 words thus far, so I’m pretty excited about the whole thing.  Before I continue on, however, I would like some opinions on the overall plot.  I figure if I get some feedback and actually tell people of my plans, I’m less likely to hit that terrible wall where ideas simply do not flow.
 
Undefined:
It starts off on a rainy day in the city.  People are gathering in front of the Paragon building to see a new superhero awarded membership to the League of Heroes. (<--Still undecided on the name.  What do you think?)  The main character, Xenia, is a thief out on the streets.  She goes to the ceremony for the sole purpose of pickpocketing, but she only steels from those who don’t particularly need what they have on them.  Anyway, she accomplishes her goal and the new superhero is briefly described.
A few days later, she’s caught doing something—not sure what yet.  A chase ensues and we learn that she has a superpower.  Despite a nice little battle, she’s picked up by the local cops and placed in a holding cell.  During which time, we have a flashback to a research institution for weaponizing powers.  (Institution for the Physically Dangerous and Mentally unstable—IPDMU?)
After this, she stealthily escapes.  Her freedom is short lived, though.  She stops a crime about to transpire (either a mugging or murder) and consequently gets caught by Acumen (the hero mentioned above)
They take her in and she trains to become a superhero. After a few random missions relating to some grand conspiracy, she becomes an official member.
 
Okay, great.  Now for the twist.
Her morals aren’t exactly heroic.  You know those stories where the hero never kills and then the baddie kills the protagonist’s family? Yeah, she’s not like that.  Killing is completely on the table.
 
There’s a big mission. It’s part of the conspiracy previously mentioned—something to do with IPDMU and her past.  Point is she brutally kills the villain. Except it’s NOT the villain—just an innocent/hostage/bystander.  Obviously, she’s expelled from the League. 
Unable to give up fighting crime—and upset over losing another “family”—she works to stop the grand conspiracy from the shadows, with shadier methods than the heroes.  In the end, she stops the baddies in a great big climax with the heroes, but they reject her. Again.
So, she does the logical thing.  She becomes a villain herself.
 
That’s all I’ve got.  Depending on my word count and such when I get through this, I’m either going to elaborate on her life as a villain or make it into a trilogy and make book #2 about it.
 
A few other things I was debating:
Should I make the book solely about Xenia and her POV, or structure it with Acumen’s too?  It might be interesting to have the contrasting good/bad viewpoints—even if they are on the same team.
I really love Acumen’s character, and it seems like a little romance could blossom between him and Xenia, but that might be a little much for the plot. Though, it could add an extra layer of conflict when she becomes a villain.
 
Comments, criticism, answers to my questions, and even additional ideas are greatly appreciated.  I’ll do my absolute best to return the favor—though I’m still learning my way around the site—if you tell me which of your pieces you want me to read.

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Apollo77 replied...
Jan. 30, 2013 at 6:00 pm

wow, pretty impressive. I so wish that 'I could get that far on any of my ideas, but i don't have the time or the patience really. But anyway, I love it. I have tosay the beginning can be extremely cheesy depending on how you play it, but the rest sounds really cool. I love the idea that she is the villain. It is so much more interesting than the cliche villain becomes good or hero becomes villain because it sounds liike she was never really either the whole time. I think there is alot of expanding that could happen in this plot however. while the you know the names here and there are a little scetchy, Acuman sounds like denture cream. I'm sorry, maybe that was too harsh, denture cream would be lucky to have a name so cool...;) It does sound like a superhero though. And about Acuman, you say that you like his character, I just wish you would have said a little more about him so I can tell if he is an interesting person. Often times I think that super heroes have no interesting qualities other than being a super hero. Like maybe they're egotistical or inwardly troubled, but I don't find that interesting. Just be careful to make your characters developed, because when they are all super heroes I think it could be easy to accidentally make them boring. Also, I like the idea of the little romance to thickenthe plot, but I also think that it makes characters extremely boring when thier main characteristic is infatuated. I think it would be interesting if the relationship only went one way. Again, I don't know anything about your characters, but it would be such an intricate plot with so many emotions you will always have something to write about. Anyway, you sound like you have a real firm grip on the whole thing, wish I could be so organized, but I never write anything that is more thanjust one scene so I don't have to develope a plot like that. congrates on it so far-good luck!

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Xenolith replied...
Jan. 30, 2013 at 7:53 pm

Thanks!  I wouldn’t say I’m really organized, though.  My ideas usually include a beginning and end, then I just type a few paragraphs about the middle bit and tweak it till it works.
 
I see what you mean about the beginning—I’ve been trying to write it, and it’s just morphing into something completely different…plus, now I have a character I don’t know what to do with.  Might be back to the drawing board—again.
 
Haha—the denture cream comment has some truth to it. I chose “Acumen” because it means quick judgment, and superhero names usually sound weird like that.
 
I’ve had a lot of experience creating characters, mostly due to an old roleplaying addiction a good year back.  I like creating characters with more flaws than anything, but spinning those flaws in a semi-good way.
For instance, Xenia is very intelligent and hates discrimination/injustice.  But she’s indifferent, calculating, very coldhearted, hates to be outwitted, and creates multiple personalities on the outside to shield her true self.
 
Acumen is very arrogant, but in a weird way.  In my first attempt at writing chapter one, I wrote a scene where he corners her, but waits for her to actually hand him what she stole and walk to him herself.  It became this odd struggle to keep their ego/dignity.  Besides the arrogance and self-confidence, he’s the opposite of Xenia.  Caring, down to earth, genuine, and willing to admit defeat when necessary…But, not quite as perfect as that sounds. I don’t have as firm a grasp on his character quite yet, so I may change it a bit…
 
Anyway, thanks again.  You were pretty helpful! :)

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MorenSore replied...
Jan. 30, 2013 at 9:22 pm

I think this is a Great plot, and it is written in an easy to follow fassion. i defenitley think you should make it a trilogy. If your writing measures up to your plot I hope i get the chance to read this book!
 
 
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MorenSore replied...
Jan. 30, 2013 at 9:23 pm

As far as what you just said about a bigging and end, I am so in that boat with you!

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Xenolith replied...
Jan. 30, 2013 at 9:30 pm

Glad I'm not the only one :)
 
I lose my ability to think when I'm tired, so I will read "How To Save A Life" after school tomorrow.  That way, my rambling will make sense.

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