Teen Ink
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TeenInk How would you rearrange this old cliche? "You can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar" http://t.co/xTNZxcKYxK
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TeenInk "Thinking is the best way to travel." - The Moody Blues http://t.co/5jzE5kVJyB
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TeenInk If this is the ending of the story, what is the beginning? http://t.co/gRzPosYXRi
With our fingers interlocked, we carelessly strolled through the park catching jealous stares. His smile lit up the darkness he held inside. My heart was warm,burning, engulfed in lovely flames. The butterflies in my stomach flew freely igniting extreme nausea. I could feel his eyes staring down on me as I fidgeted with my hair and stared at the ground feeling clueless as we sat on a cold bench. I was his goddess. His lips eventually went wondering, following the path of my collarbones, up my neck, and lightly caressing my cheek and soon enough finding my lips in the process.Everything seemed perfect. It always seemed perfect. Until the crack of dawn interupted and woke me up. Everything seemed perfect in my dreams. Reality on the other hand, I beg to differ.
Interesting! I like it. THe only thing I didn't really love was the cliche "and it was all a dream" ending. However, it seemed to fit your story well, and you disguised it very skillfully as well.
Okay so one word: beautiful! Absolutely beautiful! Please Continue and keep writing(:
