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How well do you know your antagonest?

projectwarbird posted this thread...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 4:37 pm

Like the title says. We spend a bunch of time working on our heroes but what about the bad guys? A character's enemy has to be equally well developed. So, do that here. Tell me about your bad guy and then run him or her through the CD threads. Get inside their psyc.hopathi.c heads.

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AsIAm replied...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 10:43 pm

Love it.  Here goes!



Duty: To Heart

Ummm.... well of course nobody likes the terrorists, but the main known antagonist is Alias.  He's pretty much a mystery.  He sounds English, he speaks English, but that's all they know about him.  He's the man behind the mask, giving orders to the torturers without ever revealing himself.  The unsuspecting little characters think he's the head of the terrorists, so he is really painted to be the main protagonist.  In reality he's a pawn, but nobody knows that.  He's ruthless, bitter, and sick.  He enjoys watching them suffer for reasons unknown to them all, and the mystery only adds to the fear.



Duty: To Country (sequel)

The main antagonist here is the newly crowned king of Sweden.  The war he wages wraps Dudley in with the conflict, and Bella takes it on a personal level when she marries him to bring peace.  He abuses Bella, is a merciless ruler, and is discovered to have contracted the operation the previous year, where they were captured and Ian was killed.



Duty: To Country (third book)

There really isn't a human antagonist for this one.  It's more complex than that.  I guess the antagonists are war, love, and falling from grace.


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AsIAm replied...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 10:44 pm

*Third book is "Duty: To Self" sorry :P

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projectwarbird replied...
Mar. 11, 2011 at 8:23 am

Great job AsIAm. I'll get mine posted later today. Then I'm going to take my antagonest for the first book and put him through his paces on the CD threads. I may or may not do it on the ti but I will at least write it down.

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AsIAm replied...
Mar. 11, 2011 at 8:41 am

Thanks. :) And I'll probably do the same thing.

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Auburn-M replied...
Mar. 15, 2011 at 2:16 pm

His name is Chris, a pervert who likes to take advantage and control other people. I believe this was brought on by his mother, a poor woman that took men into their home. He'd always be there, watching her use those men and then let them use her. She also is a very lazy mother, forgeting to buy groceries and leave the key for Chris to come inside. He was twisted this way, creating this urge inside him to have control and dominance he's never had. He can also get nasty and make the other party guilty very easy.  He doesn't this to my character Kesler, who he targeted because Kesler has this motherly air to him, like everything was going to be okay anf fixed. That drove Chris crazy but he had to end it the only way he knew how to. 

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projectwarbird replied...
Mar. 15, 2011 at 8:51 pm

Very Good people! 


Here's mine:

The overall bad guy is known as the Syndicate. They are a splinter group that split off from Project Lantia in late 1945. They held the position that the only way to stop the fighting was to wipe out the human race and start again. They were banished from the Island on which Project Lantia is based and went into hiding. They reemerged in 1947 at the begining of the Cold War and threatend to start an all out war between Russia and the U.S. Lantia interfered and they've been fighting ever since. The Syndicate is larger than Project Lantia but behind them in tech. They recruit madmen and sociopaths to lead and seek nothing but death.


The antagonest from the first book 'Snowblind' is and Irish sociopath named Craig Flavell. Born and raised Cath.olic he turned from religion when his parents died in a carbomb while on vacation in Bagdhad Iraq. There he met 'The Snitch,' a leader in the Syndicate recruited him into their ranks. He grew up with the Syndicate and has taken command of a disused Russian castle where the Syndicate does weapons research. His one redeeming quality is his love of music, music is the only thing that can bring him true joy.

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apocalyptigirl replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 12:01 am

Can I suggest something, projectwarbird? Since your antagonist is already Irish Cath.olic, why not have his parents be killed by a carbom.b in the Protes.tant-Cath.olic conflict in Northern Ireland? Then he can ask himself what the he.ll is the point of fighting caused by relig.ious conflict, get disillusioned, etc. It brings it closer to his own home, heri.tage, and background, and it's also more plausible than having a couple vacation in Baghdad. I don't think many people did that even b4 9/11, plus if they're Cath.olic they'd probably be visiting Jerus.alem anyway.


Just some thoughts. :)

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projectwarbird replied...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 9:04 am

Ok, thanks! That does make more sense. I created him on the fly as I wrote that so some of that is subject to change.

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Mar. 19, 2011 at 1:15 am

I fail at creating antagonists. So I prefer to write books about unicorns and rainbows! Joke. But I do suck at writing evil people, so in most of my stories their own bad qualities are the antagonists? Sort of. Its kind of hard to explain.

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AgnotTheOdd replied...
Mar. 19, 2011 at 1:43 pm

Come to think of it, I did write a story with a human antagonist.  He was a drug manufacturer.  He initially started by selling his product to the military in an effort to make mentally tougher soldiers.  The military later broke contract when the side effects began to damage the troops.  But the drug lord felt that his drugs were doing more good than harm so he tried to get them to a lot of people. If i have a human antagonist, they are almost always going to have good intentions.  So few people do things just for the sake of being mean

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projectwarbird replied...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 10:09 am

"One death is a tragedy, a thousand is a statistic." ~Unknown (and way off in my opinion. More like "one death is a tragedy, a thousand is genocide.")

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Philosophication replied...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 2:21 pm

Ok, here's mine.


She's a strange being called a Shade from beyond the edge of the Universe, in the unfathomable nothingness called the silence. A Shade's purpose is to create as much chaos and mischief as it can. To help along with this "noble" cause, it can duplicate itself creating an exact copy, pick up thoughts from other creatures, and flawlessly shape shift into anything it wants. How's THAT for a bad guy? :)

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Ella_Rose replied...
Feb. 7, 2013 at 9:15 pm

Her image haunts me. I can hardly resist it. I've been resisting it but everytime I see Ella.. I want to choke the life out of her. I feel him calling. Max that is. He said me and Sophia must do this. He trusted us to get it done. So far we have succeeded in resisting it. They want her. We need to bring her to them. She must.. NO! I'm slipping. Losing myself. I can't.
I stop the car grab the pizza and head up the porch steps to ring the doorbell. Ella answers the door and practicallly falls into me. I feel the calling even when she can right herself and I let her go
"Pat?," she questions.Chris comes up behind her and i'm able to shove back my inner killer. For now I can stop myself. Right now I feel stable enough and can judge that i'm scared for the moment when i really lose it.

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KateyKat replied...
Feb. 8, 2013 at 7:27 pm

That's really awesome, it sounds like something that would fit really well into my story im green with envy. You've got a knack for evil when it comes to antagonists.

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IMSteel replied...
Feb. 9, 2013 at 9:56 am

I absolutely agree.  Though the herais important, so is the villain.  I prefer to develop the villain through what he does, says, and looks like.  Slowely, and subtly, I introduce more and more of my character, until I have his complete image in my story.

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Feb. 10, 2013 at 11:52 am

The Antagonist from my story The Spirit and the Spectra is an absolute ruler who has granted herself immortality through an ancient binding spell. Her name is Adderine, and she is fiery and passionate, much like the leader of a group rebelling against her. Her name suggests she is serpentine, because she has the cunning of a snake about to strike. Although she cannot be killed, she takes pleasure in sending her soldiers to battle for her, and the rebellion has realized that she cannot be removed from the throne even after her men are killed. She grew up learning to care for herself, because her family was never there, except to tell her that she had no control. This caused her to yearn for power, and believe that if you want power, you have to kill for it. She doesn't believe in a diplomatic approach.

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Feb. 10, 2013 at 11:55 am

Note: She.writes.with.red.ink, if you stink at creating human antagonists, maybe you should think about having an intangible antagonist, like conflict or vengeance? I am currently writing a story where the antagonist is closed-mindedness.

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