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And he said.... She said.... I said.... They said... - Developing Dialog

AsIAm posted this thread...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 8:00 am

Everyone is different, and therefore, they speak differently.  To develop your character further, write some guidelines for their dialog.  Do they like big words? Do they use contractions? Are they bilingual?  Ask yourself these questions and more, then post some basic rules for yourself to follow when making that character speak. :)

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ForeverFelix replied...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 5:22 pm

and note (AsIAm, correct me if you think I'm wrong...): When writing in first person, remember that people tend to think the way they talk and vice versa. Of course there will be differences depending who they're talking to, but if they think in really long, complicated words and then talk as if they're in first grade...uh...wth? So yeah =) That's my imput to another one of AsIAm's numerous, helpful threads!

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AsIAm replied...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 9:51 pm

Excellent point Felix. :)  Adding to what Felix said, remember, people feel free in their heads.  So if your character talks with a teeny bit of sass, their thoughts will likely be rather sarcastic.  People are more raw and intense versions of their outside selves inside their heads. :)

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AsIAm replied...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 9:54 pm

Dudley McGrahm:

 

Uses a lot of contractions

Uses relaxed versions of words (watchful rather than paranoid etc.)

Likes big words

Likes to twist logic in amusing ways

Likes to bring things into focus by stating the obvious

Drops off when he feels awkward

 

Go ahead and try it! :D

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writer-in-pearls replied...
Dec. 8, 2010 at 11:41 pm

Paige Clarke is well educated, and has her language reflects that, however she is not pretentious. Much of the novel is written in stream of conciousness, which is much more fragmented. 

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Auburn-M. replied...
Dec. 9, 2010 at 8:23 am

I always have to remind myself of that. And then I always alomst feel as if I let a charcter down or something, like I didn't uphold to their personalities as best as I should. But still, it's fun.

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AsIAm replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 8:51 am

****Bumps for Warbird**** Also, try to not only talk in a way that's natural, but also talk about the things that the character would. For example, in the same situation, Dudley would make a strategy, Piper would say something sarcastic, Ian would make a joke, and Bella would look at it in a completely different light than expected.

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projectwarbird replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 9:40 am

Thank you AsIAm I'll work on this and post it later today: I'm going to be on the road for the next three hours. By the way: completely random question. Where did you get the idea for you username?

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AsIAm replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 9:56 am

haha I wanted a username that was 'me', and I was trying to decide: did I want to focus on equestrian or writer or warrior or something else? Then I decided that I was a lot of things, but I was always me, just as I am. ;)

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projectwarbird replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 3:32 pm

Ah, interesting. Also, it's going to be later than I thought getting this posted: a friend of mine is kidnapping me not two hours after I got back from my grandparents house.

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AsIAm replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 3:58 pm

Ooh fun! I love being kidnapped by friends.

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AsIAm replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 3:59 pm

What about your name?

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LockLemon replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 4:00 pm

I try to avoid using the word "Said" as little as possible. Although this isn't part of the actual dialogue, it affects it dramatically. For example: "Well, of course," Dallan said. As opposed to: "Well, of course," Dallan growled darkly. and "Well, of course," Dallan sang brightly. Same dialogue, same character, but totally different feel and context. For my characters, I have multiple "said replacements" that I use most often. For my favorite character, they are: growled, snapped, snarled, snipped, screamed, mourned, ect.

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BluBliss replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 7:22 pm

Mags Doesn't use big words often Speaks softly Is not shy with her words (as in, won't go "...i...um...might do that...") Uses exclamations alot. ("Hey! Craig, look at that thing over there!") Uses description in her sentences. I have to say, asiam, your CD's havedone me a world of good.

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AsIAm replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 10:30 pm

That's interesting Lemon - Stephen King suggests the opposite. Personally I'm torn.
And I'm glad Blu - I really oughta check back into them but I've been busy. Oh well, maybe tomorrow.

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Philosophication replied...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 11:13 pm

Duncan is a bit more relaxed in the way he talks, but will change the way he speaks for different people, if necessary.

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projectwarbird replied...
Jan. 1, 2012 at 11:37 am

Here it is. I guess I only thought I was retiring these Project Lantia. :) After this one I should be done with them for CD's though. David: As with everyone on Lantia, David's IQ is a step above the normal. , his laid back character leads him to use contractions and smaller words. He avoids sarcasm in his conversations. He doesn't like to complain about situations knowing that it could always be worse. When frustrated he often will burst into a Latin word or phrase. Lin: As with everyone on Lantia, Lin's IQ is a step above normal. Using this IQ she has perfected the art of sarcasm and snarkyness. She can be agressive and when frustrated tends to get loud. She understands the mindset of most girls but for the largest part does not share it tending towards the tomboy attitude. When frustrated she will often burst into a Latin word or phrase. Louis: As with everyone on Lantia, Louis' IQ is a step above normal. Louis however is a step above the rest of Lantia in terms of intellegence. This, combined with his ADHD nature, causes his mouth to run continueously. He often speaks before the thinks and usually comes to regret it. He uses big words and long explanations often nessecitating a second expliation of something. When frustrated he will often burst into a Latin word or phrase. James: As with everyone on Lantia, James' IQ is a step above normal. For James this comes through in his thoughtfulness. He is almost never quick to speak instead choosing to think things through. He is known for unrivaled problem-solving skills and is a huge help to the team. He is a stickler for the rules making sure that the team thinks things through before breaking them and he is often the voice of reason. When frustrated he will often burst out into a Latin word or phrase. Cadence: As with everyone on Lantia, Cadence' IQ is a step above normal. Because of her troubled past this doesn't show through as much. She is smarter than she thinks but her intellect is suppressed by her past. She shows little respect for adults and is always prepaired to break the rules. She doesn't trust people with her past easily and is afraid people will reject her if they knew. She looks up to David and will always listen to his instructions. She is unfamilier with Latin and cannot speak it as well as the others but does pick up phrases from the others. Aaron: As with everyon on Lantia, Aaron's IQ is a step above normal. He is also a step above most of Lantia but, unlike Louis, is capable of condensing his explinations down into more understandable sentances. His intelligence shows but he speaks on a simpler level. He is a humble kid and will willingly offer an idea. He is inqusitive and questions every plan or scheme. His curiosity leads him to ask questions that often times can reveal a hole in a plan. He knows Latin well and often finds himself translating for the others. Sarah: As with everyone on Lantia, Sarah's IQ is a step above normal. Sarah's father was a soldier in the Lantian General Army and taught her strict adherance to the rules. Sarah is a by the book person and is uncomfortable breaking rules. She is hesitant and unsure and will cast doubts on plans. She strives to live up to her brothers and is afraid to fail. She is a fast learner She reads a lot of books and this influences her speech. She is unfamilier with Latin but begins to pick up phrases. Mackenzie: As with everyon on Lantia, Mackenzie's IQ is a step above normal. She is, however, a shy and reserved person. She speaks mainly when spoken to and is not known to burst out with something. She observes and absorbs things and remembers them well. She has a way of fitting peices together and seeing past convaluted plots to the heart of an issue. When she does speak it is a timid and quite voice. When frustrated she often bursts out into a Latin word or phrase.

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projectwarbird replied...
Jan. 1, 2012 at 11:38 am

I actually agree with Lemon for the most part. However in common conversation I will use the word Said when I don't really need an inflection on it.

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AsIAm replied...
Jan. 1, 2012 at 12:06 pm

Fantastic, Warbird. :) Hope it helped.

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Jan. 1, 2012 at 12:08 pm

Pierre Tortelinni
Uses relaxed words(hardly any urgency in them)
Has a habit of switching to French when feeling strong emotions(flustered, angry, surprised, etc.)
Teases alot
Sarcasm is welcome
Not accented normally
Words a mix between intelligent and the desire to be humorous

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