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AsIAm replied...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 11:08 pm

And thanks Atrissa! :D

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JonathonWriter replied...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 11:14 pm

Derek Price-He's a prince in my fantasy series. He's seventeen years old. He has short black hair. He's a little rebellious but mostly becuase his father kept such a strict, un-loving, short leash on him. He's a fighting junkie. Loves a good swordfight. He has good morals, but he's got an edgy attitude. And he wants to break free from his life as a prince and become a warrior. He struggles with depression and thoughts of suicide.

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AsIAm replied...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 11:37 pm

Derek sounds like a 7.  I would rate him higher, because he sounds like a really great character, but I think he has traits that conflict too seriously for a high rating.  Most of the time "fighters" aren't the depressed, because they think of life as a fight.  I may be wrong on that one, but I know that I'm a bit of a fighter, and every time something bad happens I think of it as another challenge to overcome, making me more of a strong optimist than a depressed person...

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JonathonWriter replied...
Oct. 24, 2010 at 11:42 pm

Hm, you have a point.

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^unshed.tears replied...
Oct. 25, 2010 at 1:49 pm

I'll tell youmy character... Her name is KarLeigh ands she's a fifteen year lod who fugures out she can control people with her mind when a bully tries to beat her for her friend accidently running into her. KarLeigh ends up on the run from the Feds and discovers that you can't trust everybody, even yourself. She has unusual auburn hair, a medium complexion, and one emerald green eye and one brilliant amber eye. She's the main charcter in a novel I'm working on getting published in February

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^unshed.tears replied...
Oct. 25, 2010 at 1:50 pm

Also, she's really stubborn and is a total fighter for her cause

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AsIAm replied...
Oct. 25, 2010 at 2:19 pm

8 - sounds cool to me!

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Atrissa replied...
Oct. 25, 2010 at 3:15 pm

^unshed.tears- that sounds really cool! id say 9 :) asiam- ;)

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_SoftSpot_ replied...
Apr. 25, 2012 at 10:27 am

Name: Monk

Gender:Male

Rank: Random scavenger, provides small yummy novelties to whichever group he's staying with at the time.

Species: Red Fox (Sorry for being so stereotypical! D:)

Appearance: Monk walks like he owns everywhere he goes, and it gets him into trouble a lot, which he loves, despite how much trouble he actually gets into. He looks like almost any other red fox, pardon the fact that he's smaller, sleeker, and smirks more than everyone else combined. He was malnourished as a cub, so his ears and nose often look too long for his face.

Other:
Has "The Smirk" down to an art. The runt of his litter, Monk named himself and wandered off at too young of an age and wound up getting captured as an illegal pet by humans. As a result, he's good at begging, and (when unsure if his facts are right) has been known to make up Two-legger behavior. But, at heart, he's still a guy. He likes to admire the ladies, raise a little mischief, and has been known to poop where he eats. (Only once or twice. ;)

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Ella_Rose replied...
Feb. 8, 2013 at 3:09 pm

he seems interesting. I'd rate him a seven. Can you rate my two characters Ella and Shane? I have them posted under a different thread I made. its character features/ personality

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IMSteelThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 9, 2013 at 10:15 am

Um...you'd have to read the first several chapters of my book to understand the main-character.  It would take me a long time to get it down again on paper.  Good job on the characters everyone!

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Feb. 10, 2013 at 12:12 pm

This story takes place in a kind of Wild West setting.
 
Name: Meridian Ontario, but her alias is Kay Raherro
Gender: Female
Appearance: Meridian has thin, dirty blonde hair that used to be long and thick, but was singed just below her shoulders in a fire. She is tall and slender, which is an unusual appearance for people in the town that she lives in, and she doesn't appear to be a fighter. Her eyes are pale blue-gray and piercing, as if she's staring into your soul, and her face is expressive and somewhat hawk-like. She always moves very fluently and briskly, as if she has somewhere to be.
Personality: She's incredibly perceptive, and hates the law force, even though she's a detective. She says that she's a private eye, because a detective works for the law, and private eyes work for themselves. She's not particularly social, and she always acts as if she's trying to put together a puzzle of someone's whereabouts. She's pessimistic most of the time, and quick to pull out a gun. She has two handguns: one of them is always fully loaded, and the other has only one bullet left in it. An outlaw shot her with this one bullet, and, being the fighter she is, she removed it from the wound, kept it, and put it back in her gun for revenge against the person who sent this outlaw against her. She's vengeful, and always holds a grudge for far too long, and she's suspicious of everyone she meets, but once she trusts someone, she is the most loyal person you can meet.
Other: She prefers to work alone, and refuses to show strong emotion when others are around. She struggles with herself when she falls in love with her desk-jockey assistant who follows her on a case, and is forced to shoot him after he is bitten by a venomous snake on his wrist.
Meridian's story is generall quite depressing, but I named her Meridian, because she is like the center mark between a hero and a villain.

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Feb. 10, 2013 at 12:12 pm

I'd have to explain more for you to understand her fully, because she's got a lot more than that, but then I'd have to just post my whole novel on here.

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Feb. 13, 2013 at 8:23 pm

I just now realize that this thread was discontinued a long time ago...

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Ella_Rose replied...
Feb. 14, 2013 at 8:32 pm

Anything about her family? What about her age?
(For Athena)

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Feb. 14, 2013 at 11:40 pm

Her family was from an island in the Mediterranean, but when this island went to war with a neighboring island, she was shipped to the American West, where she fit in quite well, despite her conspicuous appearance compared to most people in her town. She's in her late twenties, maybe about 27, and the story mainly focuses on the last four or five years of her life. Since she hardly knew her family, and doesn't know where she's from, it isn't a big part of her life.

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Ella_Rose replied...
Feb. 15, 2013 at 2:57 pm

I only guarenteed on question I could ask! lol.. Good job i'd rate her an eight. :)

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AislinnBluejayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 15, 2013 at 8:57 pm

I have another character. Her name's Breezy Sauleovitch. She's a native Long Islander, half Italian and half Russian, and although her accent isn't the strongest she occasionally pronounces "God" like "Gawd," "mozzarella,"like"mahtzarella"and "pastrami" like "pastrommy." She is 14 years old and in a band called Little Oak Grove with her 5 best friends, who are all boys. Although I'm sure this is raising a few eyebrows right now, she and her freinds are very innocent-minded, or at least relatively.
She doesn't watch a lot of TV and her hobbies include playing guitar, writing, acting and comedy. She is physically a very beautiful girl--gooseberry green eyes and curls of rich dark hair--although she has a slightly self-deprecating sense of humor and loves mocking her nose, which she says is "so big the doctor saw me in my mother's stomach and asked if she'd swallowed a velociraptor."
Her father is a financial advisor and her mother owns a small cheese shop. She lives in an old, pre-Victorian house with her 3 little sister, 12-year-old Yelena (Laney), and the 10-year-old twins Tatiana and Julia (Julie). She has a very diverse music taste, citing genres like classic rock, alternative rock, and underground hip-hop as favorites.

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DestroyedHeart replied...
Feb. 15, 2013 at 10:06 pm

 







Name: General Waru (First name unknown)




Gender: Female




Age: 19




Appearance: Has jet black hair with a red tint, and eyepatch over her missing eye where her skin has supprisingly grown over the eye socket. Is about 5 foot 3 inches. Is cocasion with a very light blue eye that makes her appear demented and evil (Hint, Hint). Normally wears black combat boots and a long ripped red cape with hood.




Personality: Is very develish, enjoys making people suffer especially those who betray her. She loves having a laugh, like when she throws humans she doesn't like in a pit of fire or hungry animals. She does however love dogs and her most trusted official Advisory.




Bio: Was abandoned by her real parents who were a King and Queen, the Queen dying and was running around forests when she ran into a man in a dark cloak whose name was Marcus Waru. After killing her knew father because of his curelty she became an evil villian unknown to the heros fighting eachother.




Gradings?

 

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AislinnBluejayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 16, 2013 at 7:18 am

i give her an 8. She's exttremely dynamic and interesting. I like the fact that she's both hateful and actually kinda......how do I say htis? Relatable? Anyway, tell me what you think of Breezy!

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