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butnotacrime replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 10:53 am

Well, seers aren't from this world.  My world has things entirely made up by me, like the go.ds and go.dd.ess.es, and the cospis and gerylls, and the fish people, and Shanese,etc.  However, some of the Gifts are ones you might see in other books--control over plants, the ability to fly, the ability to read minds, to see the future.  You can't really change those much.  Though Arkaya is different, she has no control over her visions, she's given them by Anaia.

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thepreechyteenagerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 11:07 am

The Oracle of Delphi doesn't really have control over her visions, either, really she had them whenever, but the God's Breath also brings them to her.

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butnotacrime replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 11:09 am

Forone, I didn't know that, and for another, there's not G.od's Breath involved, Anaia simply sends them to Arkaya mind to mind.

 

Let's face it, making a world with nothing from any other story or legend is next to impossible.

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thepreechyteenagerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 11:11 am

Oh, and by the way, how do you change your screen name on teen ink???  Everyone keeps on thinking I don't know how to spell 'preachy'.  It's supposed to get people's attension, but it doesn't work in the right way...

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butnotacrime replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 11:12 am

Just go to see my stuff,and where there's the  little box with your username, type in a  new one and save.

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thepreechyteenagerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 11:13 am

I've seens people try to make a 100% different world, but it's not fun to read, because the reader cannot relate to any of the characters, the emotions they go through, or the situations they're put in.  It's just very confusing and makes it seem like the author is trying too hard.

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thepreachyteenagerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 11:21 am

CORRECT SPELLING AT LONG LAST!  THANKS A MIL :)

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kao-chanu replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 2:34 pm

hmm i dont like stories about adults lol hes a little to old for me to like he story but anyway i say a 7 would do him justice :)

My character is Cole, a 16 year old girl who's father is a religious leader. She has waist length blonde hair and ocean blue eyes. Her features are somewhat plain jane, and she is VERY modest. She's been taught her whole life the ways of Go.d, and suddenly, when her chris.tian high school is shut down, (due to lack of funding) she is thrust into a "real-world" high school where kids regularly get high and drinking is a common pastime. There her eyes are opened to a whole new world and it changes her view of everything.

how does that sound!? :D

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apocalyptigirl replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 3:25 pm

I just think the hardships of women at home on the domestic front are ignored or dismissed in favor of the more action-packed, obviously problematic issues of men at war.

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apocalyptigirl replied...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 6:59 pm

u know, i kind of liked "preechy" better...oh well. :)

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Atrissa replied...
Oct. 5, 2010 at 4:31 pm

i think thats pretty good. id give her a 9-10 :) my turn. Kadee is a 17 year old over powerful enchantress. her mother just died and her best friend is a boy shs know for forever. she has long brow hair and black eyes. shes very independent and love to travel and fight. How's that?

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80smusicfanatic replied...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 6:03 pm

Ah, so many people have replied about my person (Kendra) and I'm gonna reply to them all!

AsIAm~Love your ratings :) It's not just her mother that looks upon her as a disgrace though, it's her extended family (aunts, great-aunts, uncles, cousins, great-aunts, etc.) too.

thepreechyteenager~I sortof understand about the common plot thing. I didn't even know who Deborah Sampson was until I researched her in the library and sorry Kendra sounds like her. I never meant it in any way, shape, or form.

CallMeFelix~My cousin also thought that the story and Kendra was similar to Mulan. Mulan did not actually inspire the novel though and I totally forgot about her until my cousin mentioned her. But it's too late to change it and the novel has sort of stuck to me, so it would be like ripping out my heart to change the plot.

apocalyptigirl~I'm sad that the plot gets a five. My cousins love it and are intrigued with it when it is read aloud to them. I glad you liked Kendra's true personality though. Kendra doesn't like supporting her mother like this where her mom is like a helpless small child. And when her mom gets involved in Red Cross, she embarrasses Kendra and naggs her to help support the troops. But Kendra doesn't want to help her country in that way because it doesn't seem direct help, so being in the Army allows her to help her country directly. Hope it helps :)

Hope I answered all your replys!

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AsIAm replied...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:01 pm

Wow 80smusicfanatic, I love the depth of Kendra's character.  You really captured the feelings.  Are you, by any chance a brat? (someone with a parent in the service)

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80smusicfanatic replied...
Oct. 14, 2010 at 2:37 pm

AsIAm, you really scared me with the word "brat". But it's all good  now that I know what it means. None of my parents are in the service, except for maybe my dad. He's a contractor for the Army so he works in a building full of contractors and people in Army uniforms, but he isn't really fighting in the war or anything. What about you?

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iluvnachoThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 15, 2010 at 11:09 pm

okay here's my character.. Constuctive critisim is welcome.

Jamie- Jamie is an eight year old girl with straight brown hair and deep blue eyes. She's very petite for her age, so if she really tried, she could pass for six or five. Her parents are both in jail due to their extreme alchohol addictions, though she does have an older brother(Eli) who she loves dearly. For her age, she is very grown-up, considering all that she's been through. But once she gets pulled into a whole new world, everything changes. Sorry, i don't want to give too much away.

Common characteristics; quiet, but thoughtful. Loving and accepting. Her biggest flaw is how stubborn she is(she get's it from her brother's determination of taking care of her. In other words, she doesn't know how not to be stubborn.) Also, she is dangerously curious about everything, though she does gain alot of knowledge from it. Jamie  has the tendacy to be jealous due to never having enough attention from her real parents. Considering that fact though, she is a level headed girl, especially for an eight-year old. Her survival instincts are mostly right-on, but her curious nature tends to cloud them. Her reference for honesty is astonishing, but she doesn't always express it in a kind way. Jamie is very reluctant to change since she's never had a stable childhood.

Biggest fears-Eli dying and her parents being stuck in jail forever.

Greatest desires- For Eli to break up with his girlfriend and for her parents to give up alcohol.

Well thanks for reading. If you rate, I'll rate yours.

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Winter_Baby replied...
Oct. 15, 2010 at 11:13 pm

My main character's name is Adriana, but she goes by Ana. She is 16, filthy rich, and very pretty. She has aubry brown hair that falls just below her shoulders, blue eyes that fit perfectly wih her face, and she is 5'1. She is a very laid back person who doesn't really care what other people think about her. She perfers sweatpants to jeans, pants to skirts, tennis shoes to heels, and she hates wearing dresses. Ana is very smart academically, but not very smart socially. She and her friends are similar. She can eaisily pull an all nighter while watching reruns of her favorite shows, and she is in love with the boy who just moved in down the street from her. Her friends decribe her as "the only rich person who hates being rich."

 

so what do you think?

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Winter_Baby replied...
Oct. 15, 2010 at 11:15 pm

Jamie sounds like a very complex character. I owuld give her a 7 or an 8

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AsIAm replied...
Oct. 15, 2010 at 11:30 pm

80smusicfanatic: lol sorry about that.... And being a "brat" is really characterized by moving a lot because of the military. :)  And yeah, I'm one. :D  I was just wondering because you did a great job of portraying the extreme versions of feelings most brats feel. 

iluvnacho: 8 I like her!  Different to have such a young character.  She sounds a lot like Dudley...

Winter_Baby: 7 She sounds good, but not very original.  Great potential though! :)

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iluvnachoThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 16, 2010 at 10:14 am

Winter-baby- I like Ana, but she seeme a little overused. But I like the fact that you gave her other qualities, like she could pull an all-night by watching reruns. She seems interesting because she's amrt, but isn't good socially, which puzzles me because usually wealthy people ar social addicts. I'd also give her an 8. Thanks for your feedback. :)

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iluvnachoThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 16, 2010 at 10:20 am

apocalyptigirl- Ooh! I like Micah. He kind of reminds me of Scrooge with all the bitterness, though he's not rich. It's amazing on how much tradgedy he's been through, and yet, he can still charm costumers and I love any character who has a softspot for another! I'd give him a 9. Plus, I agree with Jill-Layton, Mich is an awesome name!

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