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I just posted some poems could some one read them and tell me if they r good

BrooklynBeauty posted this thread...
Oct. 2, 2013 at 4:37 pm

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graywolf replied...
Oct. 2, 2013 at 7:01 pm

I'd like to suggest using stanzas, and eliminating unnecessary words. Also, the poems all seem to have a very young voice, just that the writing seems immature. I don't know if that's what you were going for, but it seems misplaced.

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BrooklynBeauty replied...
Oct. 16, 2013 at 6:57 pm

Ok thank you for your response.
 

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