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Read my new poem and I'll read 2-3 of yours:)

sarah98This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 3:44 pm

checking out yours right now! id love if you read any of mine, if you dont mind. thanks :)

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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 5:10 pm

I rated/commented on your poem 'Masquerade'.

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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 5:23 pm

Ok before I submit it I just wanted to see what you think: (don't go hard on me pleas cuz I already know that it kinda sucks) If your mind is wandering And the sky seems clear and blue If you searching all those stars For something new and true Lay yourself down On a bed of silk and gold Beneath the stars Your stories unfold And you sleep And you dream And you wonder what could be And you sleep and you dream About what should be what should be When the road gets rough and bumpy And all you can do is close your eyes I will be there, always If not near then by your side So rest the journeys long So rest I promise it's almost over So rest tomorrow will be better But for right now were only getting older And you sleep And you dream And you wonder what could be And you sleep and you dream About what should be what should be So sleep sleep sleep.

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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 5:26 pm

READ THIS BEFORE THE LULLABY!!!!Sorry, the spacing is way off so after new and true it's a new verse, then after unfold its a new verse, and the part about sleeping is the chorus and then after that part the road part is a new verse, and the so rest part is a new verse, and then it ends with the chorus again. Sorry, screwy computer

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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 5:45 pm

Aw, Liv, I love that. I truly love it and it was priceless! I am so thankful that you wrote that for me. It was very beautiful and angelic and I thought that it was so delicate and kind. I really like it! Thank you so much!
 
So, we totally went a different route with this. I was going along with how I wrote my lullabies for The Valley which was basically a short, under 12 line poem, I guess. And yours is like a lovely little song. But, I will just go ahead and post the 'lullaby' I wrote for you right here and then if you would prefer I try to write you a song, I will do that.
 
 
I remember when we met
and now I've got a friend of the internet.
Though you're rather far away
you're a true friend of mine, I have to say.
When I need a confidence boost
I know that I can count on you.
When here I feel that I'm alone
you're there with an emoticon to loan.
Always giving helpful advice
our friendship is never thought twice.
In the deck of cards you are the ace
and in my life you hold a place.
So I've written this on your behalf
to thank you for all the laughs.

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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 6:13 pm

Oh my god Lexus! That absolutely, positively just made my day. So sweet. And the part about laughs how thoughtful. Don't worry you are definitely my closest pal on teen ink. Oh and thanks for the feedback on my work as well, I mean you are probably one of the most dedicated people I know, keeping up with all of your forums and such. It has been a true honor coming to "know you" on this lovely little sight. And in all honesty, some of the things that you sayin here make my day. You are truly wonderful. Keep rockin: forever and always

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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 6:19 pm

I am so glad that you like it! You are a wonderful person and I am so thankful to have joined teenink and thankful to have you as a friend. The last line, pun intended there with your user name. Haha. Thanks for all the laughs, laugh! Oh that makes me laugh. Okay, I am done using the word laugh in this paragraph!

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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 6:39 pm

Haha that made me laugh. Okay,me bough with the word laugh. So Lexus, how's it going?? I am so happy because I only have 8 days of school left and I am kinda freaking out because I am joining a new school, like I told you,must I don't want to do any work! Plus I am soooo excited for Summer because I am going to camp and Six Flags and a nice long vacation in the carrabian! Haha my bad spelling made me laugh. ;) have a wonderful day Lexus

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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 7:09 pm

I got out of school for summer on Friday! I've enjoyed it so far. Wow, you're going to enjoy vacation and like I said you're going to do great at your new school.

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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 28, 2013 at 7:22 pm

LUCKY!!! Ugh, I can't wait to leave for summer! Thanks, my new schoo is small so that will be good. Are you working on a ny new pieces? I have like three that are in progress and one pending. That take sooooo long to post them now though, I mean, my poem has been pending for like three weeks or maybe two bt whatever, the point is I WANT IT POSTED! Sorry, I am somewhat of a drama queen :) okay, that's all for now. Though, maybe I should move to New Mexico so I can get out early from school. My school gets out early for the area though, the other schools get out on like the 22 of June or something. Phew, than God that's not me. Anyways, that is officially all for now :)

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TheHuntress replied...
May 29, 2013 at 1:42 am

Hi, I'm planning to have a look at your poem :D Would you mind reading and commenting on my poems?

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Lysergia replied...
May 30, 2013 at 5:56 am

You have a deal.

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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 30, 2013 at 1:28 pm

TheHuntress - I rated/commented on 'Valentine's Ashes' and 'Ashes of Wonderland'.
 
Lysergia - I rated/commented on 'Life Crumbles' and 'The Moon'.

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DJ_Fox replied...
May 30, 2013 at 6:25 pm

I'll look at that story. I've got a new poem in my head, possibly about graduation (No, I'm not a senior), so I'll post that soon and send you the link.

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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 30, 2013 at 7:38 pm

Okay, cool.

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DJ_Fox replied...
May 30, 2013 at 8:53 pm

OK Judgement time. It's fresh onto the forums. Look for Editing Help. P.S. I have already posted a comment on your poem.

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candlelightwriterThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 31, 2013 at 11:40 am

I have read and rated your peice. I thoroughly enjoyed it. :) Would you mind checking out something of mine? I believe you've read two of my poems, but I've uploaded many more since then.

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SimplyErica replied...
May 31, 2013 at 4:07 pm

I will. Do you mind checking out a new poem of mine "Those Street People's Stories?". Thanks! (:

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emmagm replied...
May 31, 2013 at 8:22 pm

Hi! I read and commented on "The Dance of the Souls." Really great job, it's lovely! Would you mind looking at some of my poems? Thanks!

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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jun. 1, 2013 at 2:42 pm

Candle - I rated/commented on 'When We Are Broken' and 'On Top of the World'.
Erica - I rated/commented.
Emma - I rated/commented on 'I Love You Not' and 'Stolen Magic'.

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