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Aqua. posted this thread...
Apr. 29, 2013 at 8:40 pm

Why can't I tell
What I feel
I don't know anything about this
 
I've read it in books
And watched it on television
I've never felt like this before
 
Maybe this could be love that I feel
Should I tell him what I feel
But if he said no
Would I ever heal?
 
My heart
So confused
Because everytime I see you
He looked deep into my eyes
 
And my breath slowly leaves
His smiles warms me in every way
 
Maybe this could be love that I feel
Should I tell him what I feel
But if he said no
Would I ever heal?
 

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LexusMarie replied...
Apr. 29, 2013 at 10:50 pm

Hey there, Aqua! I like this, I think the set-up is nice. I like the title. I don't tend to read poems that don't rhyme, but I think that this one is very good. You put a lot of emotion in here that I can feel in each word, line, sentence, and stanza that I read. This poem did not feel forced, it flows. I agree with the concept here, hearts do feel like they are confused, don't they? I love the line 'His smile warms me in every way' it seems very sweet and honest. I like how you made it rhyme in the end, it juts summed up your feelings nicely and it was a great ending. Good job!

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