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TheEpic95This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Mar. 31, 2013 at 1:48 pm

Love Is How vague a concept, and undefined is the Modern idea of Love. “Love Is a feeling...” A feeling? "One from the heart", They say. But what can come from the heart other than blood and beating? From that RED, Twisting, PULSING thing, than Endless, Constant, Lifelong toil?
Toil to bring blood. The toil of bringing about some blood with a beating. And Life... Life to the Body, Brain, Limbs; and with Life in them, THEN they can feel... Life comes from the heart, but unlike the bloody pain and pulsing, Life itself is not so near to BEING a feeling. Then, perhaps, is Love not a feeling? Life… Life comes from a Heart’s Work! Love Is, then, Work? An endless toil? Love Is, then, a Tireless, Lifelong Struggle to bring Life to fuel another’s Life with Your Own Blood and the Restless Occupation of Ever-Pumping-- Never Stopping! Self-Giving, Then Taking, but Taking Only to give what was Taken Back to your Loveable One, sweeter and more fully filled with your Work. Love is a feeling... No! Love Is Work. Hard Work which Works only toward the Life, Toward the giving and improving the State of Life of The Other. (The One who is as much a Part Of You as your Body, Brain, Limbs.) Giving wtih the PULSUING, JOYFUL, Rhythms By Which You Move, AND by Every Move You Make. Hey. Wrote this for school a while ago. Id submitted it unfinnished (teacher wouldnt have known, i suck at free verse anyhow!) Bt now Im trying to finnish it. Any advice or pointers, or anything...?

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TheEpic95This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 31, 2013 at 1:49 pm

Love Is How vague a concept, and undefined is the Modern idea of Love. “Love Is a feeling...” A feeling? "One from the heart", They say. But what can come from the heart other than blood and beating? From that RED, Twisting, PULSING thing, than Endless, Constant, Lifelong toil?
Toil to bring blood. The toil of bringing about some blood with a beating. And Life... Life to the Body, Brain, Limbs; and with Life in them, THEN they can feel... Life comes from the heart, but unlike the bloody pain and pulsing, Life itself is not so near to BEING a feeling. Then, perhaps, is Love not a feeling? Life… Life comes from a Heart’s Work! Love Is, then, Work? An endless toil? Love Is, then, a Tireless, Lifelong Struggle to bring Life to fuel another’s Life with Your Own Blood and the Restless Occupation of Ever-Pumping-- Never Stopping! Self-Giving, Then Taking, but Taking Only to give what was Taken Back to your Loveable One, sweeter and more fully filled with your Work. Love is a feeling... No! Love Is Work. Hard Work which Works only toward the Life, Toward the giving and improving the State of Life of The Other. (The One who is as much a Part Of You as your Body, Brain, Limbs.) Giving wtih the PULSUING, JOYFUL, Rhythms By Which You Move, AND by Every Move You Make.

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TheEpic95This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 31, 2013 at 1:49 pm

Blah! The formating dosent work. Its just a block here.

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