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Rainy Day (feedback please)

jonpettigrew posted this thread...
Mar. 30, 2013 at 10:32 pm

sometimes it rains and i can

barely see outside because the windows fog up

i like to watch the droplets

that form

slide down and collect

at the bottom

i like to write my name

in the wetness even though

it will disappear

but I'll know it is there

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DoctorbugThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 1, 2013 at 1:52 pm

Hi, I really like your poem! It's got great imagery! I imagined a dark night with a foggy window. And you captured quite nicely the thought of you always being you despite your name being erased or it not being said all the time.

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