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HannahBanana99This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Mar. 30, 2013 at 3:57 pm

Crash
Hear the shattered glass?
Splitting knives
Falling to the ground.
Crash
Hear that sound?
It never dies;
The pieces scatter,
Hear the clatter.
Crash
Of the cutting glass.
Split in two,
The tension grew.
Crash
Falling blades,
Slicing rain.
Nothing gained.
Crash
Broken art.
Clean it up-
Where to start?
 
Crash
 
There goes my
Shattered heart.
                                                                                                                       

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FallenoutofgraceThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 30, 2013 at 4:17 pm

How are you not published in the magazine! ADD IT

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Lonely_Despair replied...
Mar. 30, 2013 at 4:18 pm

Very unique; I enjoyed reading this. I love it. So simple, but the ending was not typical. I thought you were going somewhere else with it, but there was so much more to that poem than the words you decided to use. So much love and despair; all broken. but It's also about accepting what has happened... and even though you weren't so blunt about it... I saw right through it. i love it.

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HannahBanana99This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 1, 2013 at 12:25 pm

Thank u so much! :)

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DoctorbugThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 1, 2013 at 1:55 pm

I was wondering for a moment there what happened to you, you captured the emotions perfectly!

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HannahBanana99This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 1, 2013 at 8:28 pm

Thank you :P

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laurengerhard replied...
Apr. 2, 2013 at 3:31 pm

This is OUTSTANDING.

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