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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 23, 2013 at 1:29 pm

Laugh-it-Out, of course I'll see this new work of yours. And Congrats! on receiving you first—first, was it?—Editors' Choice! XD I'm so happy for you. It's so great when someone whose work I admire is praised and awarded the way it should be. And thank you for admiring my work as well. Keep rockin and writing as always! 

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 23, 2013 at 1:30 pm

Cutey-Beauty, of course, I will check out your work. And you keep rocking and writing as well. :)

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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 23, 2013 at 4:51 pm

Hey Mckay! I just got a new peice up, it's called living a safe life. As for A Tragic Story, I am thinking of making it into a novel.....thanks to you ;) anyway thanks. Oh, and some advice. Do you think these are good names? Brittany Lancaster( the princess) and Rebeca (bex) Jayne? Thanks and you know. Always love your stuff and feedback keep rockin

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Breezey replied...
Apr. 23, 2013 at 6:56 pm

please read and give me feedback rate and commentTeenInk.com/poetry/all/article/543516/I-Remember-Baghdad/

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pensword15 replied...
Apr. 23, 2013 at 10:04 pm

flickers once, a blackened flame
cuts the light in devil’s name
ink that splashed upon the wall
heralded by lone nights call


 
he sputters with the candle flare
and jumps with every gust of air
he comforts the man with cradled gin
a comrade in likeness, partner in sin


 
And as the man gets up to go
the darker man becomes the foe
he follows him, a silent tail
a watcher clothed in jet-black mail


 
but man of ebon senses dawn
sees the patrons get up and yawn
he knows his death is near at hand
he has not long in mortal land


 
and as the sun crawls slowly near
demon of jet retre

 

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 24, 2013 at 2:06 pm

Laugh-it-Out, AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Seriously, you're taking my advice?! That's awesome. That made my day. Of course, they're great names. Lancaster reminds me of Hazel Grace from The Fault in Our Stars—sidenote, did you know I wrote a haiku to Hazel? Cheesy, I know; but I love the novel. Yes, the names are perfect. Keep at it. I want to read this someday as a novel. Maybe, it'll even become a movie—which I don't doubt. (Hey, I'm kinda thinking of doing some directing myself. Maybe we could team up. Like Tate Taylor did with his freind Kathryn Stockett with her novel The Help. Dunno. Would be cool.) But I support you with this story/novel and anything you do.I'm all ares to any of your future ideas with this. Just lemme know. Ok? It means a lot that you would consider my advice. I support you all the way. ^u^ Keep rocking and writing. 

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 24, 2013 at 2:16 pm

Pensword, wow, what a poem! Everything is perfect. Except in 4th stanza. Did you mean ebony rather than "ebon"? I not sure so I wanna ask you just to be certain. This had rhyme and rhythm that added a smooth flow. It is chilling as well. What's the title? Please lemme know. And if you haven't posted it on the site. Please DO. It's a very interesting poem. Interesting and intriguin in a very good way.

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 25, 2013 at 1:52 pm

Oh, by the way, the last word had me a little confused. Sorry. Can you explain it. Anytime, I read something I wanna make sure I understand it clearly.

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maypay replied...
Apr. 25, 2013 at 5:38 pm

Can you please look at my poem "What If..." I'm about to go read  some of your stuff :)

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 26, 2013 at 2:09 pm

Sure will, Maypay.

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Breezey replied...
Apr. 26, 2013 at 3:22 pm

TeenInk.com/poetry/all/article/544252/Hold-On/ please read and rate also please feel free to commment! thank you so much!

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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 26, 2013 at 9:27 pm

HEY MCKAY!!! can you take a look at my new peice Unhinged?  thank you and keep rockin ;)

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 29, 2013 at 2:48 pm

Yes, I will. Right now! I'm on it. Keep rockin'!

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 1, 2013 at 2:17 pm

Of course. I love the title already!

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Laugh-it-OutThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 1, 2013 at 10:17 pm

Hi Mckay!!! Could you take a look at my poems How the World Began and I'll Show You the Way. Also, if you have time, could you look at my poem HUngry Eyes, its on anon so you might have to search for it. Thanks! Keep rockin <3

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LexusMarieThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 1, 2013 at 10:53 pm

Mckay.. hey! Omg. That rhymes. I never realized that. I am going to greet you like that EVERYTIME now. Hahaha. Anyways, I have some new stuff up if you wanna have a look? (: And when are you going to post some new stuff, missy?

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 2, 2013 at 3:28 pm

Liv, I'll do my best, cuz you know I will. It's Mckay 100% promise and guarantee. 

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
May 2, 2013 at 3:30 pm

Lexuz, no questions asked. Of course. I will. And I'll come up with a creative way to greet you. might take me a while. And to answer your second question: SOON!  I've submitted like 10 things. Plenty of haikus. Even though i remeber you saying you're not a fan of them that much. Oh well. I'll have plenty of new stuff. Hope you like it. 

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