You know you can count on me, LexusMarie.
I read your poem, LexusMarie. As alway I <3 your work.
Hey I'd love if you could comment on and rate any of my work. Thanks!
What a lovely piece! The cliff-hanger ending especially...very nicely done.
Since im a new writter on teenink I would love if you could take the time to read some of my work. Even though im not to confident that people honestly like them, i'll also be sure to check your stuff to.
Could you read and comment on my haiku Ignite Me? Thanks!
Hi! I would really appreciate it if you could give me feeback on my poem. Here's the link: TeenInk.com/forums?act=post&topic_id=16&thread_id=74354
Thanks so much :)
I enjoyed reading everyone's work and commenting on it. Love you all!
Hi! I would really really really appreciate some feedback on my poem right here!
Thank you soooo much :)
Inside the palace
standing in her crescent silk robe
she take a sip from the chalice
pondering over her thoughts, all alone.
Staring into the burning fire
She knows what she has to do
Her heart skips a beat
As the clock strikes two.
She makes her way down the hall
Pearly moist beads glistening on her forehead
She enters the sinful chambers
To find her lover on the bed.
With one swift move
She quenches her thirst for revenge
With one final glance
She turns, never to look back.
Hi!could you please read my poem falling down the rabbit hole?Thanks!!
I love the dark ambiance you create with this poem. When you started, I was immediately pulled into the story. And the end ends with a gran finale. One minor thing: line 3, "take" you probably meant "takes". No big deal. I loved the imagery. Shame, I can't rate it here. But 5 stars from me. Also, what's the title for it? Awesome work, ChesireCat3! Do more stuff like this.
Wow, thanks so much! Yes, I meant 'takes.' Thanks for pointing that out. I am still debating over title options, but 'Sweet Revenge' is one.
Once again, thank you! And if you need some feedback, please do ask me! Oh and you can call me CC :)
Yes, I'd love your feedback. Sweet revenge is good for a title, but I feel that this poem needs a special and original title. Something to make it stand out more. Can't really come up with anything right now, sorry. But keep at it; something will come pop into that creative head of yours.
Hey, CC, what about Vendetta or Vengeance Is Mine for a title for your poem? I know it may not be much; I thought you'd like to know. Please do notify me when you pick a title for your poem. C:
hey mckay! could you take a look at my peice A Tragic Story, it recently recieved an editors choice (something you have a startling amount of), but sine it is my very first one, i would love if you could take a look at it and offer your wise advice and feedback. it goes withought saying that i admire your work greatly so....keep rockin
Anything of mine if you want to :) hehe
Hey mckay could u chack out my peice! :)
im friends with laugh it out i thnk u have read some of her peices