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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Mar. 15, 2013 at 4:12 pm

Whatever you want me to read I promise to read and comment. Paste your here, or put a link here, or just name anything you want me to comment on—doesn't matter how many.
Please, take 5 seconds or your life to comment on any of your works. You don't have to but I'd appreciate it so much.
Some people here promise feedback for feedback. Yet they never return the favor, and that's not cool. 
But I will definitely check out whatever you want me to read, and I will comment on it.
Also, please, read my thread A Mission to All the Poets here and reply on it. Do join that mission to comment on any uncommented works by your fellow writers. :)

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Soccer23 replied...
Mar. 15, 2013 at 5:57 pm

Can you plese read some of my work for me please?Thank you so much!

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Literature_Darling replied...
Mar. 15, 2013 at 10:06 pm

I would love you to read some of my poems! And I am about to go check out your work!

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 16, 2013 at 1:35 pm

I've read most of your work and loved it. The photograpphs you toll were also beautiful. i read you loved To Kill a Mockingbird. I wrote a review on it. Mind reading it and commenting on it?

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 16, 2013 at 1:36 pm

That was to Soccer 23.

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 16, 2013 at 1:48 pm

Literature_Darling, I've read your work and loved it as well. Thank you all for introducing me to new work.

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jonpettigrew replied...
Mar. 16, 2013 at 3:51 pm

I d be over joyed if you read my work lol

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 18, 2013 at 1:58 pm

I read your eyes, jonpettigrew, and thought it was marvelous. Mind seeing some of my stuff?

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SouthernRose718 replied...
Mar. 18, 2013 at 5:56 pm

I would love for you to read my work and graciously provide constructive criticism

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impartial_geek replied...
Mar. 19, 2013 at 6:52 am

As I walked past the aisle
Of my dreams,
The dreams and aspirations which my eyes had seen.
Blink! And they were shattered,
Not by a stone or a storm you see,
But by a choice NOT MY OWN! 
 
I was a bird,
Who soared high,
Sailing towards his dream above,
Then a day came when he stood at crossroads.
Waiting for the moment of truth
But he took a path eluded by thoughts
That were not his own.
He straddled to the choice not his own,
Hoping to succeed against odds unknown
And thoughts not his own.
Will he survive the path?
Only his fate will know!
As he went on a path not he chose,
And if he survives, he will carry a stone
Flashing in his mind that it was a choice not his own….
Alas.
please give a feedback to my poem..

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poetofdarkness replied...
Mar. 19, 2013 at 1:32 pm

Would you like to read my latest THE BREAKDOWN

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 19, 2013 at 1:32 pm

I love the structure and the message.
The beginning reminded me of a wedding: "the aisle of my dreams"—beautiful line. But, from what i can infer, this poem does not deal of wedding.
Then, the rest reminded me of the novel Divergent—which I'm reading now and finding it to be entertaining—with the whole making choices the are life-changing. 
One thing only: Can you tell me who the "he" was in the second stanza of your poem. Sorry, for misunderstanding the "he"?  Other than that is was straightforward and enjoyable to read. I'd love to read more of your workd in the future. 

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 19, 2013 at 1:33 pm

Yes, I will poetofdarkness.

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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 19, 2013 at 1:36 pm

Southernrose718, forgive me for being stupid, but what work do you want me to read. Was it the personal quote—because I will—or is it work that you will publish in the future? I just wanna make sure.

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HannahBanana99This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 19, 2013 at 5:50 pm

Hi! I'd absoltely LOVE if u could rate and comment my works :) thx so much!

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TheSkyOwesMeRainThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 19, 2013 at 6:21 pm

I would appreciate it so much if you would look at some of my work! Thanks! 

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Sparkle1popsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 22, 2013 at 12:30 pm

I will make sure to chesck out your work :) Please look at any of my work and comment! I really need advice on how to make it better

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thatunknownthing replied...
Mar. 22, 2013 at 2:03 pm

TeenInk.com/poetry/free_verse/article/533806/Nobody-is-a-mistake/ and any other piece of your choice? Thank you! :)

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