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when life brings you down

writerauterThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Mar. 4, 2013 at 12:31 am

sometimes i feel like screaming my head off
sometimes i just go lose it in my bedroom
sometimes i want to feel loved not broken
sometimes i wish none of this ever happened.
 
life flies you places you've never been before
one minute here and the next out the door
one second life is normal the next its changed
days like this one i wish happened more often
life brings me down i decide to fly up again
when life brings you down...decide to fly up again.
 
right now i feel like taring apart this room
right now i feel like dancing alone with you
right now your gone and i feel soooo alone
right now i wish that you could hear me.
 
life flies you places youve never been before
one minute here the next out the door
one second lifes normal the next its changed
days like this one i wish happened more often
life brings me down i decide to fly up again
when life brings you down...decide to fly back up again.

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Alex_Writer replied...
Mar. 7, 2013 at 1:53 pm

Great job, I loved the whole concept.  For "when life brings you down... decide to fly up again" I would reccomend have "when life brings you down" as one line and "decide to fly up again" as a seperate line.  It was really interesting word choice, nice piece :)

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writerauterThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 26, 2013 at 12:44 pm

thanks!:)))

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