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Anna141This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. posted this thread...
Feb. 28, 2013 at 1:59 pm

Capsize:



I scream,

and I can hear

it stop

the wind.

I can hear it

dry the rain.



I am being

dragged

down;

 

Through the

dry rain

and the

still wind.

In to the stormy

water.



I scream again

pleading to myself

to free my foot

from the binding rope

that laces around my ankle



Icy water

shocks my body

as I fight

with the brittle rope

binding me to the sea



dragging me away from

the still wind

stealing me from

the dry rain.



As I free my foot

and climb on top of the

main sail,

my screams subside;

 and the wind and the rain

rejoice in freedom

against my face.



I swing wet limbs

onto the slippery underside

of the boat.

now wrongfully face-up

and watch

the brittle rope

sink



down.

 

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Apollo77 replied...
Feb. 28, 2013 at 8:19 pm

nice, i like the story, very entertaining. i don't understand the supershort lines, but i kind of like them and how they create suspense as they get longer and then lose it as they get shorter. If you could look at any of my work that would be great, thankS! really great poem

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