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ILuvBritishBoys posted this thread...
Feb. 28, 2013 at 11:29 am

Hazel eyes meet brown,
and the world is encased in fire.
Setting aflame the flowers,
their sweet smell lingering near.
Bracing for impact, our hearts collide,
lightning strikes, thunder beats its drums.
 
We are two in one,
Fire and ice,
Though opposites attract,
they do not always stay together.
 
Animosity and outrage mingles in the smoke,
the world burning away,
and to us they leave the flames.
Born anew, changing into someone else,
like a phoenix from the ashes.

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ILuvBritishBoys replied...
Mar. 1, 2013 at 11:05 pm

Id really appreciate some healthy feedback on this :) Thanks :)
 

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WarlockThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 3, 2013 at 2:17 pm

I like it but i think it would be nice if you made it revolve around two people. Over all i ove the discriptions and all that. Good Job.

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ILuvBritishBoys replied...
Mar. 7, 2013 at 11:26 am

Thanks! :)

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Alex_Writer replied...
Mar. 7, 2013 at 1:42 pm

I think you did a great job on this, the word choice and imagry is great 

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