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The girl in red (COMMENTS!)

Sparrow posted this thread...
Feb. 27, 2013 at 11:36 am

the girl in red once has said
that she can read people's minds
that their true pain is what she finds
I asked how she can see such signs
she said its like reading between the lines
the girl in red once took my hand and lead
me through the crowds of pedestrians
she pointed out some as the heart-strains
I asked why she came up with such names
she replied they are the ones who don't follow their dreams
the girl in red once had tears to shed
and held on to me so tight
she said no one ever uses sight
i asked her why this would be right
she cried because then they would see the light
the girl in red once looked less fed
her eyes more sunken in
her body more frail and thin
I asked her how this happened
she whispered this is my end
the girl in red now lies in a bed
made of silk and roses
new beginnings is what her death proposes
i asked many questions of how's and why's
she taught me the importance of lives

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Sparrow replied...
Feb. 28, 2013 at 11:09 am

Please comment! I really want to know what you think

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WarlockThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 3, 2013 at 6:25 pm

I love it..........its ture and lives are important and  I love your name by the way....=)

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HannahBanana99This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Mar. 4, 2013 at 6:19 pm

I love this poem! :) really inspirational and true... nice job! (Im terrible at rhyming... u make it look easy! lol)

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Sparrow replied...
Mar. 6, 2013 at 4:09 pm

Thanks so much :)

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