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Lil_Miss_Turtle posted this thread...
Feb. 24, 2013 at 7:49 pm

 
Even in dance I can see it through your eyes,

I can see the pain behind your clever disguise.

As we spin and lock our gaze,

I can see the emotion burn like a blaze.

I can read your heart like an open book,

The same way you can read me with just one look.

Hand in hand we turn and spin,

I can't help but smile at that devilish grin.

At first we both seem fine,

But we fight our internal battles; pain yours, and lust mine.

As we part hands and step apart,

I see your hands shake and feel your broken heart.

We glance back smiling at the past,

Both knowing it'd never last.

Looking back at the time we spent together that night,

I wonder what would've happened if I put up a fight.

Would either of us feel these emotions,

If I had put feelings behind the motions?

Lost in time I lose my step and begin to fall,

You catch me and locking my eyes you say, I'm here for you through it all.

Together we finish the dance,

And I whisper lets take another chance.

From behind your blank face,

I see your heart quicken its pace.

You pull me close and tell me you love me,

I smile and say this was meant to be.
-Samatha Miller

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Lil_Miss_Turtle replied...
Mar. 3, 2013 at 2:39 am

I would really like some feedback. I just joined not too long ago and I've just started sharing my poetry. Comment for comment. Thanks. :)

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Warlock replied...
Mar. 3, 2013 at 1:32 pm

I LOVED it....it was well written and it made me cry. I like it so much.....It ist cool if i can copy and keep it i want to add it to my keep sake poems.

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Lil_Miss_Turtle replied...
Mar. 4, 2013 at 3:22 am

Ya I don't mind as long as you give me the credit. :) And thank you. I'm glad you liked it.

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Arayana replied...
Mar. 6, 2013 at 12:17 pm

This is a beautiful poem. I loved it

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Lil_Miss_Turtle replied...
Mar. 6, 2013 at 7:25 pm

Thank you so much (:

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