I will comment on anyone who reads this and comments! :)
Touch of the tip of your wondering hands,
I ache for the embrace.
Breeze of a sigh, of a lingering sigh,
I feel it slipping, erased.
Murmurs of words that I long to hear,
I hate your silly lies.
Traces of tears long been replaced,
I hate this old disguise.
Its quite nice, ill admit im not too good at interpreting poetry, but am I correct in saying that this is about one who lost their lover and is now putting on a brave face, but is aching inside?
Click my name to see my poems, I have 3 comment would be appreciated.
:) sort of, it's about a girl who pines after someone who's distant and who used to love her. I will check out your work!
Um, I can't find your work.... Are you sure it's posted yet?
'hate' was repeated in both the last stanzas, and otherwise, your poem was fairly good. not boring but not all that interesting either.3/5
Thanks for the honesty:) The last two stanzas went together, so the repetition was purposeful. And I agree, it isn't my best work! Thanks for your feedback:) I'll go read something of yours now
Haha, turns out I've read your work and commented before! But I found one that I hadn't read yet, I think it had something about lemon juice in it:) (sorry, can't remember the name of it)... You are a very talented writer!
You're right, it isn't your best..but I liked the repetition....Plus the word "lingering" was amazing...