Teen Ink on Twitter
Do you ever find yourself expecting things to change? Wishing and waiting, praying that you don’t go insane? Wanting more than what life has in store, slowly slipping and eventually losing yourself. Your stuck, your pondering, your just simply wishing.
To be brutaly honest it's just to cliche. You need something speacial in there that will really make it stck out to your reader.
I didn't like how you structured the poem into one big paragraph, but I did like your asking question to provoke a response in the reader. I definitely could relate to it:). Could you read something of mine please?