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InuLover_95 posted this thread...
Feb. 13, 2013 at 3:11 pm

Your loving vengeance

Your hateful mercy

A two sided coin

I don't know which I prefer

I cannot live without your love

And your forgiveness I can't go without

So extract your vengeance

Or hate me thoroughly

It's not my decision

Though my choices

Brought us here....

 

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ZozeyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 16, 2013 at 10:04 am

Okay like it, but why is "And your forgiveness I can't go without" bolded? It is a somewhat strong line, but I don't feel like it is very strong, and the boldness is drawing unwanted attention to it. I really really liked the last two lines.

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RarelyJadedThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 16, 2013 at 12:35 pm

This is really cool! Is it bolder because of the structure, how it sticks out farther than the other lines? Or maybe how you talked about a two sided coin and there's "two sides" of the poem divided by the bolder line? Lol, or maybe I'm reading too much into it. Anyways, I thought your word choice was very good, and your insights very interesting:). Could you read something of mine? Thanks!

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InuLover_95 replied...
Feb. 19, 2013 at 2:50 pm

thanks for ur input.... and IDK why it bolded, cuz i didn't do it :)
And, yes, i can read something of yours

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Lost-In-Heartbreak replied...
Feb. 19, 2013 at 3:08 pm

thATS pretty good. can you rean and comment on some of my poems?

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InuLover_95 replied...
Feb. 19, 2013 at 3:20 pm

yes i can:)

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