Teen Ink
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TeenInk How would you rearrange this old cliche? "You can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar" http://t.co/xTNZxcKYxK
Fri May 24, 2013 10:17am Reply Retweet Favorite
TeenInk "Thinking is the best way to travel." - The Moody Blues http://t.co/5jzE5kVJyB
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TeenInk If this is the ending of the story, what is the beginning? http://t.co/gRzPosYXRi
There seems to be
an overwhelming number of
children.
Pretending to be what
they are not.
And it seems to me
all of these
children
try to become everything
they cannot.
It seems this sea
of
children
do not understand the importance of what
they were taught
About growth;
About change;
About struggle;
About life;
About death.
Same deal as your last poem. Expand it. And try to find a beat with the wording. It's clever and its getting around to being insightful. But theres no impact. Tie the idea in with your emotion, not your grammar logic. Its okay to bend a few rules to be poetic.
