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Five Miles From Home.

A_Fate_Unknown posted this thread...
Feb. 4, 2013 at 3:18 pm

Five Miles From Home.
 
Time and time again we find ourselves.
So far from home.
So much time wasted on you.
It's time to let it go.
 
Five miles from home and there's nothing left to say.
Things will never be the same.
(We ignored the warning signs
Now we're paying the price.
 
I'd rather we just left this behind.
We ignored the warning signs
Now we're paying the price.)
It's better than faking.
Better than changing.
I never wanted you to change.
 
Now when I look into your eyes.
There's a fire dying somewhere inside.
You'll never know what this meant to me.
 
Somewhere along the lines.
You left yourself behind.
 
Five miles from home and I'm not coming back.
 
just a torn picture in a broken frame.
Things will never be the same.
 
I can't pretend anymore.

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SakuyaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Feb. 4, 2013 at 8:40 pm

I imagine this(if this is a poem that goes with music) in a nice minor key on the piano, and perhaps a hint of a guitar on a low A and some smokey, alternative voice like Elliott Smith singing along. Now I wish I could hear your version of it put to music to add to this great poem...

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SuNshiNe007 replied...
Feb. 8, 2013 at 1:56 pm

Wow breathtaking and I must agree with Sakuya. You are one of the best song writers and poetry writers I have met in a long time. It is always an honor to see and read the new stuff you put on here.

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A_Fate_Unknown replied...
Feb. 8, 2013 at 5:32 pm

thanks guys this is my rough draft and is still in editing mode but ill post the final when i have it :)

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SuNshiNe007 replied...
Feb. 11, 2013 at 12:31 pm

Awsome ill be waitin for it! :D

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dancer25 replied...
Feb. 19, 2013 at 11:19 pm

I lost my words and breath reading this. i loved it.it was very relatable... to me atleast. keep on writing

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A_Fate_Unknown replied...
Mar. 29 at 8:04 am

Wow it's hard to beleive I havent written anything in a year...

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Theartist22B replied...
Apr. 1 at 4:02 pm

Words can't descirbe what this poem feels like inside it just reaches in and touches my soul, I'm serious I loved every word.

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