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kaelinmarie13 posted this thread...
Jan. 24, 2013 at 11:28 pm

 
Darling, darling
(dear oh dear)
Tell me somethin' special
(here)
Set it on the street to sun
(but carry it in quick! before it runs!)
Fill it to the full with rain
(and load it with love, lipstick stains)
Smear it through with a painted cloud
(or hide it high above our frowns)
'Cause darling, darling
(dear oh dear)
Your words are ones not all can
(hear)
 
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Lawless-FlameRoseThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Jan. 25, 2013 at 10:02 am

This is really creative with very thoughtful rythmes i like it.

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CowgirlBri replied...
Jan. 25, 2013 at 9:47 pm

I really like this, good job.

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