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praise_pray_write posted this thread...
Jan. 18, 2013 at 6:30 pm

Frustratingly angering
It is abusive to the mind
Into some deceivingly shallow crevice
All important tasks slide
Little bells hinting to the brain
Something has been neglected
Rummage around
It must be here somewhere
Come on now,
Then up they rise as if they never fell
But time has passed
Oh no
Oh well
Late is not perfect
Forgetting is not ideal
But as a fallible creation
Forgiveness is necessary

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honoraryhobbit replied...
Jan. 20, 2013 at 7:50 pm

This is great. I like how you were able to both vividly describe forgetfulness and comment on it, all in less than twenty lines. Conciseness is an art, especially in poetry. :) Ironically, this piece leaves a memorable impression. Nice job!

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Jan. 21, 2013 at 9:13 am

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the feedback. :D

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