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Spectrums by Shontelle

ShontelleSymone posted this thread...
Dec. 12, 2012 at 12:29 pm

From the ashes in the cracks shall you watch me rise
Strengthened by day due to broken, silent cries
He's the man in the mirror, the one he hates the most
She's the woman of the future who's blazing heart roasts
From the doubts of those she deemed most high
She scoffed at the eye of the low as they lie
His hate burned brighter as his passion for her was higher
Outside she ignores the distain she lives under
Both step on flames of loneliness
Only to enjoy the fruits of their own regrets
 
~Shontelle Symone~

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Dec. 12, 2012 at 3:19 pm

Wow...This is amazing! In the 7th line though I think it should say 'his passion for her grew higher' or even maybe  'grew hotter' since you are talking a lot about fire. Its just my opinion though. Other than that I have no advise for you :)

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ShontelleSymone replied...
Apr. 29, 2013 at 11:09 pm

I apologize for being so late. I have been busy. This means a lot to me because I have been going through writer's block. This was my first attempt in a while. Thank you!

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