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writerauter posted this thread...
Dec. 7, 2012 at 8:32 pm

its time to break down
to just stand up and let it out
make fists and scream all night
yell, I have finally had enough!
scream until you cant anymore.
she hides her face as the camera flashes
she wonders why they always come after her
laughing at her  and yelling mean things
she  thinks to herself as they walk away
why does this always happen to me?
why am i always thier target?
she never did anything to them
she squeezes her eyes shut
as the tears rolls down her face
she picks up the bottle of pills
relief in mind...suddenly the bottle is empty
she falls to the floor uncontious 
a small peice of paper flutters to the floor
with the words in big letters and dark ink:
"you win, im gone, hope your happy now."
think before you say something
because the price paid, could be anothers life.
its time to look around
to stand up for those who cant
stick by them and help them fight
tell them it will be alright
fight for them when they cant anymore.
he hides the pain as his life goes on
he wonders why they always mess with him
tripping him and making fun of him
he thinks to himself as they push him down:
"why did i ever do to them?"
he never even said anything to them
he punches the wall hard
as the fear clouds up his eyes
he puts the gun to his head
his pain in mind...pulls the trigger and lets go
he slumps up against the door
a lost souls last words never to be heard
with his silent cries lost and forever unspoken
think before you do something
because the consequence that comes
could be the ending of a life.
she said, i need someone to hold my hand
he said, i just need someone to understand.

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Sparkle1pops replied...
Dec. 7, 2012 at 11:14 pm

That was good, but you might want to go back and capitalize all of your "i". Also you should try to add some more descriptive adjectives.

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kdaws15 replied...
Dec. 8, 2012 at 1:53 am

i liked it, but maybe edit a few spelling errors.

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