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MissDreamer34 posted this thread...
Nov. 25, 2012 at 4:08 pm

She lives with a mystery.
She sticks to herself.
Repeating history,
I think to myself.
 
Background of pain.
Future of success.
Laying in the rain,
I live in distress.
 
Dry blood & scars.
Reminicing on life.
Instead of reaching for the stars,
I reach for the knife.

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RBrown201 replied...
Nov. 25, 2012 at 4:16 pm

WELL,
As depressing as that was, it was also beautiful.....
Is this from a personal life experience or what?
I have a similar story to that of this poem.
Check out my thread?
TeenInk.com/forums?act=post&topic_id=16&thread_id=71319

and

TeenInk.com/forums?act=post&topic_id=16&thread_id=71320

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Rae-Lynn replied...
Nov. 26, 2012 at 1:14 pm

I like it. It's very simplistic, but still shows tons of meaning.

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MissDreamer34 replied...
Dec. 7, 2012 at 10:41 am

Thank you(:

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Rissbreezy replied...
Dec. 7, 2012 at 4:45 pm

This is a great poem, with a deep meaning. I like how you tell a story for the first three lines of the stanza, and then expain what you are doing in the last line. Very well-written (:

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kirstiecookie replied...
Dec. 9, 2012 at 1:04 pm

It may be just me, but I did have a tough time understanding the first stanza. I think it's because you used She in the first two lines, then switched up  to I. Were you talking about someone else first? Maybe fix reminiscing- spelling. On a happier note, I really enjoyed reading this! Very to the point, but the point is well made. Great job!

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AislinnBluejay replied...
Dec. 9, 2012 at 3:50 pm

No offense, but it sounds somewhat emo. Is it praising, deploring, or just simply stating her actions? It's sad. Maybe there should be a sequel where she decides to let go all the sadness and frusteration she's built up-not by venting, but just by letting it go.
 

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Arayana replied...
Mar. 7, 2013 at 12:09 pm

i relate to this poem alot because i have a similar situation. i loved the way you wrote this. It was beautiful

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MissDreamer34 replied...
Oct. 13, 2013 at 7:49 pm

Thank you so much!!

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