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She lives with a mystery.
She sticks to herself.
I think to myself.
Background of pain.
Future of success.
Laying in the rain,
I live in distress.
Dry blood & scars.
Reminicing on life.
Instead of reaching for the stars,
I reach for the knife.
As depressing as that was, it was also beautiful.....
Is this from a personal life experience or what?
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I like it. It's very simplistic, but still shows tons of meaning.
This is a great poem, with a deep meaning. I like how you tell a story for the first three lines of the stanza, and then expain what you are doing in the last line. Very well-written (:
It may be just me, but I did have a tough time understanding the first stanza. I think it's because you used She in the first two lines, then switched up to I. Were you talking about someone else first? Maybe fix reminiscing- spelling. On a happier note, I really enjoyed reading this! Very to the point, but the point is well made. Great job!
No offense, but it sounds somewhat emo. Is it praising, deploring, or just simply stating her actions? It's sad. Maybe there should be a sequel where she decides to let go all the sadness and frusteration she's built up-not by venting, but just by letting it go.
i relate to this poem alot because i have a similar situation. i loved the way you wrote this. It was beautiful